leonard daranjo

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Subterranean Train

truth is revealed by
unravelling of time in
a sea of silence

— leonard daranjo, Sep 04, 2008

Critiques

t. reflexion

17 years 10 months ago

Just curious

I have little knowledge of Japanese literature, so I may not be the best to appreciate your poem. Tell me, What is this truth revealed in a sea of silence. Sometime, I find it difficult to express what I know. Words seem to distort this 'truth' and what comes out is an imperfect form of what lies within. For example, try to tell someone about God. It is a difficult thing to do because, the more words you speak, the more you confuse your listeners and at the end, confuse yourself. I like the philosophy in the poem and its brevity. Well done and best wishes.

leonard daranjo

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Reflexion

Thanks a million for taking the time to stop by and read. I do agree with you that words distort the truth. That is why, in order to really understand the deeper truths, we have to approach it with a silent mind. After all words are the creation of men; silence was always there. In the Hindu Philosophy, it is believed that if a vessel (meaning mind) is full you cannot put anything into it but if it is empty (meaning silent) the great truth- untarnished by our emotions and prejudices - will descend and fill the void, filling one with the bliss of omniscience. Silence has always inspired me. Cheers ... Leonard

themoonman

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Leonard...

love your poem... He who listens.. learns.. I believe that's it... or that's what I got anyway.. something I try to instill in my children.. but it took me so long to learn not to shout out what I think suddenly... and I still do it at times so ... have I learned.. ouch... Richard good to see you posting..

leonard daranjo

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Richard

It's great hearing from you. Yes, that's one of the aspects because, in order to listen, one does have to keep the mind silent. Thanks a million. Cheers ... Leonard

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

silence

Smiles:) Barbara i am lost also to the truth in this silence. i like this well written piece either way.

leonard daranjo

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Barbara

Thanks for stopping by to read and comment. Appreciate the encouraging response. Cheers ... Leonard

panaella

17 years 10 months ago

(.....)

Hello Leonard, Loved your Hiku. My response?............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................. (silence) Regards, Ellie.

leonard daranjo

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Ellie

Thanks for stopping by to read. I really appreciate it. Kind regards ... Leonard

rider68

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Leonard

Buddha & Confucius has stirred to read your scripted words, wisdom and enlightenment,........ well crafted, I enjoyed reading and the lesson, Be well my friend....Very best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

leonard daranjo

17 years 10 months ago

Thanks Peter

for your most encouraging words. A friend always ... Leonard

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

there is more subtlety here than meets the ear

You ever heard a truly silent sea? it whispers, sussurates and rages wildly. Is silence the ear of god? Nah, its just the vacuum between the stars. cheers, Jess

leonard daranjo

17 years 10 months ago

Thanks Jess

for stopping by to read Cheers ... Leonard

Eduardo Cruz

17 years 10 months ago

time

Leonard, Lessons that we learn as children come to light as we get older, and come to the understanding of listening and not just talking. Truth is sometime that is earned, you can not buy it with all the treasures of the world. Only through comtemplation of the world around us can we find enlightement I love the simplicity of these few words that open a treasure of thought thank you so much. Eddie if a man does not know love, he does not know God

leonard daranjo

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Eddie

Thanks a million for your most analytical comment. Indeed it is through contemplation of the world around us that we can find enlightenment. This something we must never forget. Thanks again and cheers ... Leonard

barbsdad2003

17 years 10 months ago

I could paraphrase ...

a well-known proverb: that truth is in the eye of the beholder ... but only if the beholder allows it there. Ergo, the benefit(s) become then possible to be realized from a time of mindful (mindless(?)) silence. Masterful write. Masterful insight. Thanx, Chuck

leonard daranjo

17 years 10 months ago