DRAINAGE

DRAINAGE The tide flows in from the seaBringing to our land great things from abroadWith big merchant ships berthing at the portsWe must dredge our water ways Digging deep the muddy beds and swampsOut to the sea, our produce ebbed with a hissOur children in pursuit of greener pasturesWith craze for visas, a wave of brain drain Boats and canoes in shallow watersLike leaves dropped in running rain waterEmpty the drift into the AtlanticAnd are buried with the flood

— t. reflexion, Sep 03, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

Critiques

DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

I like this...

"like leaves dropped in running rain water" Love that line, my friend. Sincerely, Mark

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you

The beautiful ones have gone abroad, leaving us, the forgotten to hold the fort Best wishes. T.

easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Very well written sir!

There is this contrast between the first and the last stanza that is very striking,we preparing our own waterways for them and they in turn taking our own people,what a contrast!thank you.

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

From me to you...

No, it should be me thanking you for reading and commenting. Take a look at visa lottery and importation of finished goods from the raw materials and produce taken from our backyard. What will happen to a nation that allows this to go on. Your guess is as good as mine. Best wishes. You disappeared and reappeared, where have you been?

WonderGolly

17 years 9 months ago

Yeap!

I like the second stanza. this is the truth men live this shores with the heads of wizards to the foreign hives only for the tides to beat them back with their heads full of debries... that is the reward when we live for greener pastures and reach there to meet whithered pastures... Golly Wonder.

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

And I say yeh-kpa...

You've got the joke. Thanks for reading and for the comment. Cheers T.

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

You bring a grandeur to this

You bring a grandeur to this site that has some young poets are afraid of perhaps feeling pretentious or not cool. Let them them look at goatmans's poetry. He is perhaps the youngest on the site and profound in his craft and eloquence. cheers, Jess

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you

A poet, or by extention, a craetive writer should be honest with his pen to state clearly how he/she feels and the rest will flow naturally. I owe a great deal to this site because it provides that outlet, above all, it offers listening ears and appreciative minds. Thank you Jess and best wishes. I am looking forward to getting critical commentaries that will help me improve on my style of writing.

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

T...

this poem is from one side to the other... in just a few lines, so much is said ... you truly have a poetic voice that is very welcome here and you have at least one fan in South Carolina, ... me! Richard

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you

Richard, my friend I know you've been there for me, always, from the very inception. I am also your fan. I like you very much. Thank you for your support. Best wishes. T.