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ACCEPT OUR SACRIFICE

ACCEPT OUR SACRIFICE Blessed be thy name, Akwa Abasi IbomOil flows in crude and palms, as we drinkTo the enriched new state in the south-southOur ancestors were noted for farming and fishingWomen wore waists beads and fed their childrenWith breast milk and remains of past sacrificesThe children knew how to keep the vultures awayFrom eating the meat at the altarTill the sacrifice was accepted by the Itina Our distant friends can share from the oil proceedsBut cannot be priests to our deityIt would be sacrilegious, for they knew notHow to keep thieves and vultures awayIman, born and weaned at the shrineWould not let the vultures take away the meatAnd knew what the sacrifice meant to the peopleIf only the sacrifice is accepted by ItinaThen our worries would be banished Our shrines do not discriminateOn basis of where you come from, tribe or zoneStrangers are welcome and can partake in the feastThey can also share with us the blessing of our sacrificeBut some distant children brought dogs and vulturesFrom east, north and west to take awayThe hard measured meat at the altarAnd from the shrine of Itina, we weptOur plea now is for an accepted sacrifice 
 
— t. reflexion, Sep 01, 2008

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Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

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Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

T.

I hate to admit my lack of knowledge here, but if you could explain a little to me, I would appreciate it and maybe understand the poem a lot better. Right now, I am sorry to say, that although it is written well, I am not quite sure what it is about except maybe the old religion of your land. Please elucidate for greater understanding on my part. Thank you. Respectfully, Rett: "The only thing observable with the naked eye to exceed the speed of light is rumor" Unknown
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Religious elements...

The shrines in the poem belong to a distant past, the religious elements are cover-ups used to address social and economic problems arising from oil exploration in the south-south states of Nigeria. The threats posed by militants in the Niger Delta, agitation for greater control of resources, illegal bunkering and oil spillages etc are the pains of removing the hard measured meat at the altar. Those who benefit from this oil now are strangers to our land, their claim, is in being fellow Nigeria and the owners of the land are left with nothing. In this circumstance oil has becomes a curse instead of being a blessing, a larger picture could be seen in Iraq. Thus, our plea for an accepted sacrifice. Akwa means great, Abasi means God, Ibom means mighty Itina used to be the god of Iman, my clan. There is no known worship of Itina going on now.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Okay, I get it now

Thank you. Sometimes things don't translate across the water so enlightenment is good. As to the Iraq situation it is funny how many people in my own country think that it was all about oil when it wasn't and to this day we have not gotten a drop of oil from Iraq. We buy on the open market. The three countries apposed to our invasion were France (who was dealing with them illegally on oil) Germany (who was building military bunkers) and Russia(who was selling weapons and guidance systems to them. Most of the so-called "weapons of mass destruction" that seven different countries spies said were there were either spirited out to Iran and Syria or didn't exist. The only things really found was poison gas and 500 tons of Yellow Cake Uranium for Nuclear weapons that everyone insists they didn't sell to them. Ah well, enough of that. I have re-read your poem now with a greater understanding and must now say that it is excellent. Thank you for the knowledge to appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "The only thing observable with the naked eye to exceed the speed of light is rumor" Unknown
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Thank you

Rett I appreciate your comments and the time you gave for this poem. I have a feeling this poem is not explicit. If it is meant to highlight economic and social problems, then the voice should be clearer and stronger or may be I should write another without the religious veil. What do you think? I hope to find that voice one day. Thank you very much. I can feel the warmth of your heart each time I see the cat and my fingers on the keyboard. Cheers and best wishes.
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

T.

You may have something there. I am not against religion as long as I understand it and it isn't causing harm, I believe in God, Allah, Yahweh or however you want to call Him, but don't believe in churches. I just had a hard time getting a grip on this one. Part of it may be the religious aspect and another likely source may be a cultural difference. Something got lost in translation. It is an intelligent write, but somehow my brain refuses to see what the whole is supposed to mean. I hate it when that happens. It is kind of like me and Algebra, I have had some wonderful teachers and my wife and youngest son can do it in their head. When they explain it, it goes into my ears as English, but reaches my brain in Chinese which I don't understand. *LOL* That is as close an analogy as I can make and I apologize. Since your explanation it is cleared, but I keep thinking I am missing a vital part of it. I apologize for being dense on this one. Respectfully, Rett: "The only thing observable with the naked eye to exceed the speed of light is rumor" Unknown