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Electric Blue
Electric Blue
Aug 31, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Summer's flown

Dark is the moon
So cool and damp
Fall is here

Summer's fled
in the night
was it an illusion
a lost memory

Just to dream
When summer
was a coming in

Soon Jack Frost
will arrive
chills down
the back bone
a sure sign
we greet

Until Summer is a
coming in
— Electric Blue, Aug 31, 2008

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Arrow

17 years 9 months ago

I like this

but I can't clearly state why. It reminds me of when I was young and noticed it got dark earlier - sort of eerie. I think, though, I would have like it better if you'd used your own words instead of taking that line from the round. Your own words were quite good.
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

Summer's flown

Arrow Well just day dreaming, remembering lazy days of summer. As for the last line, Yes, it is from the round. But it just popped into my head and seem to give this poem a finished or maybe anothr begining. As are the cycles of the seasons. Thanks for your comments my friend Electricblue
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 9 months ago

Summer fades fast

Smiles:) Barbara summer is leaving and fall is fast approaching i like the how you summed up a year in few lines of words nice seasonal poem
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

Summer's flown

Barbara. I just love the seasons where ever i am. They cunjure such magic. My patchwork landscape unfolds into that coat of many colours. Thank you for you comments Electricblue