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Happiness Not Your Own

If you make your self responsible for another’s happiness,

You’ll lose yourself and your self respect

You’ll fall to the ground in utter distress.

Your nights will be filled with torment and a complete lack of rest.

You will end every day crying you did your best.

You will wring your hands and beat your chest.

You will run back and forth your life a total mess.

Everything will crumble though you protest.

Fights will break out and there maybe arrests.

In the end you will fail and what did you expect?

You throw away every ones last bet.

Having learned now nothing will work in retrospect.

Once you’ve allowed your own neglect.

Take heed and remember these words don’t reject

In each of our lives we have to elect
 
to allow the treatment we expect

What ever we accept is what we will get.

If we are willing to abuse ourselves in loves quest

Then go right a head read this poem

as just a playful jest.

— autumnphoenix, Aug 25, 2008

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Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Bravo!!! Applause

Great use of rhyming words and excellent use of words period. Wonderfully done. I would break this line into two. "In each of our lives we have to elect to allow the treatment we expect" like this as it would give one more rhyme. In each of our lives we have to elect to allow the treatment we expect Respectfully, Rett: "If life is a bowl of cherries, why am I in the pits?" Erma Bombeck
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks Rett,

I thank you for the advice. It does flow better in two lines. I almost felt like Dr. Seuss with this one. lol. always learning, Dana
yenti

yenti

17 years 9 months ago

not your own

That sums up what to expect if you leave you behind, Who is this Dr, or is this Dr Who, sorry just had to say that, loved the work in there I wont say just what the Dr ordered whoops there I go again LOL Lovely piece, Yours Ian.T
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Dr. Who is Who's Dr.?

Ian started it! Nyah! Respectfully, Rett: "If life is a bowl of cherries, why am I in the pits?" Erma Bombeck
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 9 months ago

Now Boys,

Hello Ian, thanks for the read, and the comment. :) Sometimes I am tempted to leave titles off. They seem to come to me after the piece is finished. Sometimes I think they don't fit. I am glad you pointed it out that way. The title does fit this time. It is what the doctor ordered. lol Dana
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Good write

Liked the rhyming,and also the message therein.Thank you.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

Dana

Absolutely spot-on. There is so much truth to this, nicely written!
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 9 months ago

Dana

There is much truth and wisdom in the words of your poem. I enjoyed the read very much! Always, Cat
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 9 months ago

Hi Cat

Thank you for reading and commenting. I know the truth in the words but it is hard to remebmber them in a relationship. Dana
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

Oh Ow!

You wrote this straight at me through some psychic connection, didn't you!? I have learnt this lesson many times and yet each new relationship either me or the other abandons themselves. I have given up. Really I have, batchelorhood and companionshop from now on. Really. I mean it. I really do. Till next time. cheers, Jess
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 9 months ago

So say I,

I have said those words once or twice. I agree we are much alike in many ways Jess. I too will remain single and enjoy companionship "online". Really I will. Really. :) Your psychic friend, Dana