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Autumn (longing)

Within the vineyards sun whispers
Bacchus’ metamorphosis –
revival of pleasures and anger

Trees tremble their leaves in torment
for the wind will bring aging –
birds on the sky started their roving

Baudelaire, Verlaine, Rimbaud – their laughs,
wearing black and red, got still
The cold fog, the fist of leaves … my thrill

Ravens crossing the bloody sun
with apathy; an old gun
brings back to life the lost glow: Autumn

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Region, Country: Romania, ROU

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yenti

yenti

17 years 8 months ago

Autumn

A very strong piece, and the little group of french poets dropped in,(well they met there) to make more colour for the season, rather the wine as am more familiar with that side lol Lovely piece anyway Yours Ian.T
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pinksheep

17 years 8 months ago

This

is a poem and an 'alf-REGARDS
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

17 years 8 months ago

Thank you my friends

Hi everybody. I'm sorry for the late response but I have a very busy period I pass through. Barbara, Ian and pinksheep, I am glad you liked my poem and I appreciate your lecture's signs. Best wishes, Marius
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 8 months ago

Superb imagery and craft as usual, no crit.

This poem has an extra dimension to me, Sydney, in fact most of Australia, does not have 4 proper seasons like Northern Hemisphere, partly it is more temperate and most of the trees are evergreen or semideciduous. So it's also a longing for something much evoked but never experienced. cheers, Jess
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

no crit indeed...

this is a five star poem for sure.. sounds so good out loud with beautiful images and the longing.. wow.. very good Marius! Richard
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 8 months ago

Beautiful

Autumn is my favorite season to experience and to write about. I love the images you discribe Marius. These stanzas are classic and stirring in their vibrancy. Dana
whitetea

whitetea

17 years 8 months ago

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I feel the calmest in autumn. I have never loved summer though, except for this year. I loved the light and even the heat. This is the first year that I've felt I am handing summer over to autumn. Even so i still look forward to the November air.
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

17 years 7 months ago

Thank you all for your

Thank you all for your kindness and I appreciate it! Sorry for my delayed response - I'm passing a busy period! Richard, thank you and I'm glad about your opinion! Dana, thank you so much - autumn is my favourite season too! Whitetea thank you very much for the lecture sign and glad you liked it! Thank you all! Best wishes, Marius