Janice Pearce

Aug 21, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Sunkissed

From beneath the door
sun wraps around my ankle
in refracted rays

— Janice Pearce, Aug 21, 2008

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Excellent Janice

I think I would just title it Rays. Beautiful image! Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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Rett, Thank you for reading, and your suggesttion on the title. I appreciate your thoughts and your comment ~

Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Nice Sun Image

Now the only things missing in whether this is a sunrise or sunset. This I feel can add a more powerful emotion to the haiku than what's given. Good poem.

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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You are perceptive Samuel, food for thought. Thank you for reading, and your comment~Always appreciated.

Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Anytime

I'll be looking forward to your next piece.

rider68

17 years 9 months ago

Beautiful Janice

The Artist is really showing through, excellent thought and account, This evokes/stires quite a picture Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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Peter, your comments are always welcome, and I appreciate your kind comment sir~

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

I like it too, Janice. Love

I like it too, Janice. Love brevity speaking volumes. ~A

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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~A, I thank you for always having time to read my poems, and your comments!

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

Janice

I agree, this is beautiful. Very visual

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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Linda, Thank you for the kind words I'm glad it brrought you there!

zarul

17 years 9 months ago

just 3 lines?

how short it is. or am i missing something?

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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zarul, This a structtured form of: five, seven, and five sylables.

zarul

17 years 9 months ago

huh?

you are confusing me. haha. could u please explain this in more detail. Send it through PM, if it creates no trouble to you.

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

zarul

Japanese form: The first line has five sylables The second line has seven sylables The third line has five sylables

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

Janice...

how about something like the light from within. beautiful picture of your ankles... Richard

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

ahhh. Moon-man you notice

ahhh. Moon-man you notice such wondrous things!!! ~A

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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Richard, Glad you got a chance to read this, and I appreciate your suggestion on the title. I'll have to think about it today~

barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

A soothing write ... and thanx

On a technical note, I think you need the be before the 'neath to make the first-line five-count. Unless my math's off. And by the way, I love the haiku structure. Says so much with so few. Words, that is. Yours, Chuck

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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Ahhhhhhhh Chuck you never cease to amaze me , catching my mistakes. Very observant will edit this, and add a title. Thanks, once again~Your math is not off!

DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

I would call this...

"Sunkissed" Enjoyed this much. Sincerely, Mark

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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Mark, thank you for the suggestion I have to edit this to make Chuck, and myself happy, and will add a title. Appreciate your comments always~

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

Mark

You won! Thanks for the prize winning title!

DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

Your welcome..

But it was your words which left me feeling "kissed by the sun" I love this. I may have to try one of these sometime. Great Job! Mark

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

Sunkissed

Mark, now you've got me on the edge of my computer chair I'll be waiting for yours!

barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Just a note ...

to congratulate Mark on his so well-chosen title. Thanx, Mark, Chuck

prayersbyPatty

17 years 9 months ago

I loved the haiku

Janice- you never cease to amaze me. This is beautiful. Someday... I hope to write one and I will. I like the suggestion from Mark about the title. Patty

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

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Patty, Thank you for the suggesstion for the title, always appreciate you stopping by!

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

Janice...

I love the title.. As soon as I read Marks comment I agreed with him and I guess you did too... excellent choice... love your revision.. makes the syllable count right... excellent Haiku Richard

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

SunKissed

Richard,Just a great big THANKS, for being so supportive!

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

utterly gorgeous

this could have been a winner in the recent competition, from the mundane to the sublime, cheers, Jess

Janice Pearce

17 years 9 months ago

Sunkissed

Jess thank you for taking the time to read, and comment. I appreciate it!

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

p.s. when I ran a film production company

it was called "Sublime and Ridiculous Productions" cheers, Jess

prayersbyPatty

17 years 9 months ago

Janice

You picked the perfect title. I love it.

whitetea

17 years 8 months ago

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Its calming just reading this.

Janice Pearce

17 years 8 months ago

Hello whitetea

Thank you for such a compliment~much appreciated! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers