Janice Pearce

Aug 21, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Sunkissed

From beneath the door
sun wraps around my ankle
in refracted rays

— Janice Pearce, Aug 21, 2008

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Excellent Janice

I think I would just title it Rays. Beautiful image! Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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Rett, Thank you for reading, and your suggesttion on the title. I appreciate your thoughts and your comment ~

Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 11 months ago

Nice Sun Image

Now the only things missing in whether this is a sunrise or sunset. This I feel can add a more powerful emotion to the haiku than what's given. Good poem.

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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You are perceptive Samuel, food for thought. Thank you for reading, and your comment~Always appreciated.

Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 11 months ago

Anytime

I'll be looking forward to your next piece.

rider68

17 years 11 months ago

Beautiful Janice

The Artist is really showing through, excellent thought and account, This evokes/stires quite a picture Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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Peter, your comments are always welcome, and I appreciate your kind comment sir~

Kailashana

17 years 11 months ago

I like it too, Janice. Love

I like it too, Janice. Love brevity speaking volumes. ~A

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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~A, I thank you for always having time to read my poems, and your comments!

Linda Moses

17 years 11 months ago

Janice

I agree, this is beautiful. Very visual

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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Linda, Thank you for the kind words I'm glad it brrought you there!

zarul

17 years 11 months ago

just 3 lines?

how short it is. or am i missing something?

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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zarul, This a structtured form of: five, seven, and five sylables.

zarul

17 years 11 months ago

huh?

you are confusing me. haha. could u please explain this in more detail. Send it through PM, if it creates no trouble to you.

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

zarul

Japanese form: The first line has five sylables The second line has seven sylables The third line has five sylables

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Janice...

how about something like the light from within. beautiful picture of your ankles... Richard

Kailashana

17 years 11 months ago

ahhh. Moon-man you notice

ahhh. Moon-man you notice such wondrous things!!! ~A

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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Richard, Glad you got a chance to read this, and I appreciate your suggestion on the title. I'll have to think about it today~

barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

A soothing write ... and thanx

On a technical note, I think you need the be before the 'neath to make the first-line five-count. Unless my math's off. And by the way, I love the haiku structure. Says so much with so few. Words, that is. Yours, Chuck

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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Ahhhhhhhh Chuck you never cease to amaze me , catching my mistakes. Very observant will edit this, and add a title. Thanks, once again~Your math is not off!

DarkinAZ

17 years 11 months ago

I would call this...

"Sunkissed" Enjoyed this much. Sincerely, Mark

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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Mark, thank you for the suggestion I have to edit this to make Chuck, and myself happy, and will add a title. Appreciate your comments always~

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Mark

You won! Thanks for the prize winning title!

DarkinAZ

17 years 11 months ago

Your welcome..

But it was your words which left me feeling "kissed by the sun" I love this. I may have to try one of these sometime. Great Job! Mark

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Sunkissed

Mark, now you've got me on the edge of my computer chair I'll be waiting for yours!

barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

Just a note ...

to congratulate Mark on his so well-chosen title. Thanx, Mark, Chuck

prayersbyPatty

17 years 11 months ago

I loved the haiku

Janice- you never cease to amaze me. This is beautiful. Someday... I hope to write one and I will. I like the suggestion from Mark about the title. Patty

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

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Patty, Thank you for the suggesstion for the title, always appreciate you stopping by!

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Janice...

I love the title.. As soon as I read Marks comment I agreed with him and I guess you did too... excellent choice... love your revision.. makes the syllable count right... excellent Haiku Richard

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

SunKissed

Richard,Just a great big THANKS, for being so supportive!

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

utterly gorgeous

this could have been a winner in the recent competition, from the mundane to the sublime, cheers, Jess

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Sunkissed

Jess thank you for taking the time to read, and comment. I appreciate it!

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

p.s. when I ran a film production company

it was called "Sublime and Ridiculous Productions" cheers, Jess

prayersbyPatty

17 years 11 months ago

Janice

You picked the perfect title. I love it.

whitetea

17 years 10 months ago

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Its calming just reading this.

Janice Pearce

17 years 10 months ago

Hello whitetea

Thank you for such a compliment~much appreciated! "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

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