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t. reflexion
t. reflexion
Aug 20, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

HOUSING FOR ALL

HOUSING FOR ALL   House rents, exploits Called business enterprise Draining the tenant’s income In cyclical repayments Turned sour, when merchant vessels Perished in stormy seas; Landlord calls in due course Heartbeat of tenant skips in fear Like Adam of old On hearing the voice of God, Looking for where to hide Lest he be driven out of Eden. These rented houses, where I live Are like traps set for city dwellers  
— t. reflexion, Aug 20, 2008

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Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

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Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Cool...

I like the sense of realism within this poem. I concur on pretty much all of your points. I think the biblical reference to God could've been left out, but that's just me. Overall decent poem.
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 9 months ago

Eden is man's first home

Eden is man's first home, we were told so, free of rent, what else could I compared to the comfort of our homes than paradise, lost due to our inability to pay the almighty Landlord or due man's disobidience. To this end, he struggles in the forest of errors, this trap or this world, to regain with hope. Thank you for the reading and comment. Best wishes.
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Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Thanks

After telling me this, now I feel the significance of that line and it adds a new dimension to the poem I haven't seen before In terms of divinity. Nice touch. Sorry for the ignorant response earlier. Very Good Poem.
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

I finally found you!

Hi this is Opeyemi(Tunde's brother).I finally found you on the website and I'm so elated.This poem is a good wtite,I have nothing to add or subtract from it.I will add you to my buddylist and check out all your other works.Thanks
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zarul

17 years 9 months ago

hi friend

this one is very nice from you from all point of view. but, i have to readn it more than once to really sense the great beuty of this poem. 5 thumbs up for you, my friend