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barbsdad2003
Aug 23, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

the patch


the patch

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[i]ts mystery
is its life
                   ---Bagehot
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the dark

though moving patch
upon the ground

I thought I saw
at midnight walk

was not in fact
a patch indeed,

no, not at all

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easylife_2

17 years 8 months ago

I like your structuring

But could you please explain the rationale behind this?Thank you.
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barbsdad2003

17 years 8 months ago

no rationale, none at all, nada ...

merely observation/recognition, with (unsolved) mystery left but lying in her proper place. a child's view sans presumed adult analysis; because, after all, analysis serves no purpose but to hinder/interfere/muddy/tarnish. esp in this case. thanx, Chuck
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

Hi Chuck...

you left it vague enough for me to see a snake or a shadow.. and I like it! Richard
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barbsdad2003

17 years 8 months ago

you see neither ...

less nor more than did I. thanx, Chuck PS: When I visit your profile, it presents a lineup of "poem," one following after another. Won't let me access anything of yours. Leaves me puzzled. Am I missing something?
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 8 months ago

profile...

I changed the background and it changed the page... does view all work get you there..? I'll report it to Andrew... and thanks for letting me know as I thought it was something on my end... but on my end view all does work... thanks Richard
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barbsdad2003

17 years 8 months ago

Hi again!

Just now went to your profile. Won't let me see titles, won't let me access anything you've posted. All's there's a lineup of "Poem." There's no View All Work available for clickin'. My loss. At least till it's fixed. Thanx for checkin', Chuck
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rider68

17 years 8 months ago

Thought Provoking

Hi Chuck....Liked the Imagination play, Was it soil that was soiled upon the ground, or a Black Cat / that then despaired, Thought provoking, liked this a lot, stirs the imagination, Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
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barbsdad2003

17 years 8 months ago

I really do suspect ...

it was a wild critter that hugged darkly against the ground ... and only moved/shifted position as I drew uncomfortably close. But alas! 'twas much too dark out ... and I could not see except to note the inky patch ... and then that it moved. Thanx again, Chuck
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barbsdad2003

17 years 8 months ago

Wow!

I hadn't thought of that, Cat. How delighted I am that you see here what I haven't noticed ... until now that you mention it. Thanx, Chuck
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panaella

17 years 8 months ago

mystery

Hello, The air of mystery is intriguing in this poem...'I thought I saw'....but then you define that the patch isn't a patch...and that it has an 'organic'/living quality to it...almost like an animal, slinking off into the night. Eerie. Clever. Regards, Ellie
Rett

Rett

17 years 8 months ago

Chuck, Guess what I saw?

One hint. I wrote about my big fear. *G* Love it. Respectfully, Rett: "The only thing observable with the naked eye to exceed the speed of light is rumor" Unknown