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Treacherous Ways

Insincere kisses they place
On my cheeks and my face
Eager to please, I accept the
Meager offerings of affection

Of a family I am trying to please
One who should be as a mother
The other as a sister

Their promises of love as fleeting
As butterflies in Spring and as
shallow as the color orange

Tracherous hearts and surely
Unsaved souls
They withhold their love if I do not their bidding
And speak of me with evil tongues

"I knew she would be this way", they murmur
As they lower their eyes
And slide them to the left

Becoming as jackals in the heat of the
lion's kill, to take what they do not deserve
And I, eager to please, silently accept
The treacherous ways of a family I cannot appease
 
— Linda Moses, Aug 19, 2008

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Region, Country: Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: rethinking this. have recently started reading the works of some of the greats, I will comment later

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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Good write

I like the way you came out against treachery,but is the colour orange really shallow LOL.Good read anyway.Thanks
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

Shallow orange

I don't know, but you know how things pop into your head as you are writting.
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poewriter58

17 years 9 months ago

treacherous unsaved? who are

treacherous unsaved? who are they without knowing that the poem feels unclear Chrys
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

Inlaws

I wrote this after my sister in law once again caused problems, not to mention my mother in law. I am unsure how to put that in, I will have to think about it. Maybe I should write just abut sister in law and mother in law and rename it Dragons
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DarkinAZ

17 years 9 months ago

ungrateful kids?....

selfish lover or lovers? co-workers or members of your church? I agree with Chrys, who is this written of? Inquiring minds would like to know! I think then this will be a compelling write. Sincerely, Mark
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Really good Linda

I understand how that can be. Although not my family, when I first married my wife, I was the most evil, hard headed SOB that walked the face of the earth. Nothing I did was right. This lasted for the first 5 years of marriage, then the middle sister got married and I became endowed with sainthood. *LOL* One little error if I may..."Unsaves souls" I think you meant "unsaved souls". Am I correct? Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

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yes, you are right unsaved is correct. I do not know how I manage to miss the typos, but I do. Thank you.
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

Unsaved....correct

Thank you Rett for reading. I wrote this abut a year ago, when I was irritated with the both of "them".
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Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Good

Did you mean to put "unsaves souls"? It gives a much different meaning and interesting meaning at that, but I feel the correct version is "Unsaved souls", like Rett pointed out. Regarding lions Kills, isn't there supposed to be an apostrophe between lion and s? If not, it can give meaning to one or many pupils. Sorry for the rambling. Overall, decent to good poem with emotion that I can feel in the sense of being around phonies who can care less about you.
SG

Samuel Johnnie Green

17 years 9 months ago

Anytime

Thank You. Looking Forward to seeing your other work.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 9 months ago

all i can say is

Smiles:) Barbara great write. my hubby can relate to this for the first ten year of our marriage though he won my dad over and now get along with my sib somewhat. my mom never interfered.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

Hi Linda...

I got that it was your mother and sister but not the in-laws.. but understood exactly what you meant and how it feels to be unable to please those around us... sometimes you gotta kick up a little dust.. Hope all is well Richard
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

HI, Richard

Thank you for reading. I got along great the my mother, and I never was lucky enough to have a sister. Yes, it was the inlaws. All is well. Thank you
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 9 months ago

Zarul

Thank you,zarul. your comments are appreciated