autumnphoenix

Aug 08, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Ditch Lily

Beauty unmatched
by anything on earth.

A celestial glow
to emanate your worth.

Standing solitary
among the drainage fare.

An empty stretch of lonely
highway here and there.

Graveled edges and ditch's
spread three miles or more.

Weeds and reeds
fill every whole but yours.

Alone you stood
with trumpet edges flared.

Glowing silver white
eternal beauty you share.

Where did you come from
and who placed you there?

An obvious gift from God
in a place so desolate and bare.

— autumnphoenix, Aug 08, 2008

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Critiques

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

God cops the praise and nor the blane,

Your last line 2 lines deroyed a beauftiful poem. God is just science we don't understand. cheers, Jess

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

God

God is the name I chose to call what I don't understand. I may call it something else tomorrow it depends on my mood. Science is a wonderful thing. I will not argue about either. Thank you for the read and your comment. I am pleased you found my poem beautiful, even if the feeling didn't last. Dana

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

don't mind me

I am very sensitive to any ovetones of religion. The feeling did last. We just have different terms for the ineffible. A beautiful poem. cheers, Jess

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

Most people

Its cool, I feel most people in this world are over senstive. I don't let that make a difference to me. I am what I call a pagan christian. My beliefs are not very much like my family, friends or others. I just refuse to argue it with anyone. I will tell my beliefs to who ever ask me ,but I won't fight about it. I was not offended by your comment. Please never fear to offend me, its good for growth. I knew it would come from someone. You can believe it or not, but I knew you would be one. I like to have peoples true response, its another way to grow. I hope you were not offendeed by my response. I hope to write other poems that you feel you can be real with.(she said smiling) As I said last night that was the term I used in that one. Wait til you read one of my short stories.(lol) Thanks Dana

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

pagan christian, that is exactly what my mother is

I don't like classifying myself but you might call me a pragmatic atheist shaman. LOL. I know it sounds weird but it works for me. When I was much younger I was a completelty anti-religious bigot, still am highly suspicious of organised religion. Something I find weird is that I have many devout Christian friends (only the ones who don't try to convert me). There is goodness everywhere if we look for it. I think we might be friends. cheers, Jess

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

I agree

Actually I think we were already friends. It is what it is. I am drawn to elements from early religious teaching I combine them with my own baptist up bringing. I am comfortable with these other things so they work for me. I didn't think much about it when I was young. I just went to church and basicly believed what my family did. Now I shock some of them when I call myself a pagan christian. I feel it has to do with being afraid of not fitting in.(for them) I've never been afraid to be who I am. Dana

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Dana

Beautiful poem. I loved it. If you look around you find beauty everywhere. I want to ask a question though because I am not quite sure which way you meant one line. "fill every whole but yours." Did you mean it as the metaphysical "Whole" or was it a mis-type of the word "hole"? Other than that I really got into this one. P.S. At least Jess will tell you how he feels even though sometimes you might want to hit him with a baseball bat. *LOL* Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

Good question

To the question on the line, I really think it would go either way(now). All along this road were ditches with weeds and reeds in this one there was only this bloom. It was surreal. I may have inwardly compared it to the world in general. I was on my way to handle a problem when I saw this lily. I pulled paper from my bag and just wrote. When I got it out last night I read it for my son. He asked if I had submitted it, I did. It was however a mis-type if you believe in such things.(she said smiling). Perhaps I was feeling what my fingers pecked out.lol As for Jess I hope he does keep it real. I like that in a person. I too can make some people want to hit me with a bat. ps: the Universe speaks to us always we have only to listen. Dana

Janice Pearce

17 years 10 months ago

Dana

Absolutely beautiful piece here, I loved it! Your description brought me there~

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

Thank you

Thank you Janice, for taking the time to comment. Most of all thank you for reading my piece. There are so many wonderful poems on this sight to read. I am a little sorry it took my so long to share my poems with others. I have had the most wonderful welcomes here. Than you again, Dana

themoonman

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Dana...

loved your poem... I stopped on the word whole and I too feel it works, it made me think about it and then moved on to the rest of your write.. I am not a religious person, but I do believe in beauty and poetry and life.. your poem is very good. and I like the way you handle yourself in your comments.. you are a welcomed writer on this site... Richard

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

well said, Richard

cheers, Jess

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

Truth is

Hi Guys, This is all new to me. I have written poems for what seems like forever. That part is not new, nor is writing. I use to keep a journal from age 18 to 30. I wrote everyday pretty much. I wanted to be a writer. I wanted to be read by the world over. I have never studied poetry or creative writing. I have recently began to read poetry forms. I did't even know what a stanza was. I just liked the look of sentences grouped together in even numbers. I have read some old masters, and some modern poets. As I said I never knew any poets until now. I enjoy the comments and questions. It is the first time anyone has asked or commented on my writing. I am loving it. Please keep it coming. I hope to put some of my older poems on soon. So far the oldest was a year old, "Tortured Spirit", and the newest was "Ditch Lily". Keep those comments and questions coming. I am glad to be here. Thanks, Dana

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Careful Dana

Being with the rest of us, may lead to other bad habits, like writing stories and learning. *LOL* You are the type person that all us old, and new, writers and poets like to see. Someone who enjoys it and learns and can take critique w/o blowing up like TNT! Glad you are here. Respectfully, Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

watch out for Rett

I suspect he is a closet Jesuit. Which is probably not such a bad thing. We all have dangerous minds here, probably a pre-requisite to being a poet. cheers, Jess p.s. the Jesuit thing is a joke about one of the best SF books I have read recently, "The Sparrow" by Mary Doria Russell

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

As soon as I can afford it

I am gonna buy that damn book Jess and see who you remind me of. *LOL* Respectfully Rett: "Life is like a beach. Salty, gritty, somewhat fishy and at other times, downright crabby!" Rett 2008.

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

Death

is the only excuse we have not to learn. If we are alive and do not learn something new everyday, then we are dead. I am alive. I may not always agree, but I can learn even from disagreement. Thanks to all, Dana