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Oh Baby

The stars of the night
 So big and so bright
The Stars of the day, how they play

Upon our minds and entwined in the sences, of the day
They guide us through the lives we choose and yet 
Is there a way to be like them?

If only upon the darkened skies of night
On which they are displayed
But, yet again they are so close to the silvery screens
and shown in sparkling lights

They that imitate us; and that which concerns us
Our dismays, our pleasures and their sins
Oh the stars of the night and the Stars of the day

Some so bright and others just plain dim
None the less they point the way
To shine like them, to float about as they do
To be afforded as there are

Among these celestail beings is where I long to be
To reside in HOLLYWOOD; maybe
But, baby among the stars, that is truly
where I wish to be

Ten tiny toes; ten little fingers too
 Curious mind never enough time
Little one, you would not be here now
If I did not pay homage to these Stars

Toasting them insanely and tossing back a few
 Here is where I met your mother; she was a shinning star to me
[A simple coat-check girl ]
Who smashed my Top-Hat and ripped my Tails

A shock and surpise, a little rise
Nine months later, there was you
Our little Star

A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Aug 05, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

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Critiques

Rett

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Hey, I like this

And here is the kicker. Your start reminded me of "Deep in the heart of Texas" and the darn thing reads almost true to that tune all the way through. *LOL* Good write Donnie. Rett: "On life; Ah such a wondrous thing, beauty and love to behold and experience! On death; I can wait to see..." Rett 2008.
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 5 months ago

Wow I didn't even see that

til' you mentioned it. I am not from there or do I remember ever singing it. But I have heard it sung in some comedy Iam sure. The things that stick in ones mind have stuck out in others. Cool, Donnie Deep in the heart of Texas. lol
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poewriter58

17 years 10 months ago

Donnie

change your first line it does sound to much like the dsong deep in the heart of texas to close for comfort but baby amongst the stars try among the stars Here is where I meet your mother wrong tense here is where I met your mother A lttle rise should be little There was you our little star should read there you were our little star Donnie for every place you have a semi colon break that line off there and make the nesxt a new line you are using semi colons the incorrect way a line break will show each thought Chrys
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 5 months ago

I don't know for some reason I like Amongst better

but, then I should use the Stars instead of the stars. Amongst people or among planets not sure here but, I defir to your expertese. Donnie/Sinbad Thanks for pointing it out. They are not so obvious to me. A blind man sees with his fingers a deaf man hears with his eyes, a mute also speaks with his.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

a tad trite and sentimental

I repect your poetry but this one didn't grab me. Then aain i have been commenting a lot tonight so don't pay too much attention. Perhaps I should go and read or watch a movie, I get insensitive when I comment too much. cheers, Jess
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 5 months ago

Ah don't worry about nothing

Not very poem will apeal to everyone all the time. I was not sure I was going to post this because, the machanics of litature or even my native tounge, I find my self lacking in, although I do well for a time. I forget the rules of the puncuations, and we All know I suck at spelling. This one needs correct programing to come across. As I mean for it to, and I sometimes feel very sentimental, a depressed mind refects quite often. Thanks Jess. Best wishes Donnie/Sinbad