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I like . . . -your use of line breaks, esp. in lines 3 and 5. I esp. like line 5 because, although you seem to be using it in a passive sense, the way the line is separated allows you to read it in an active sense. And, the things we choose not to be, either through action or neglect, are so important. -the use of "Him" as opposed to "him" in the next to last stanza -the distasteful quality of the (leering) child. It's harder to give when a person is repelled in some way. I've mixed feelings about the use of McDonald's and Pale Ale imagery. I'm not familiar with the sign and I had to look up Pale Ale, which took away from the poem. I would have preferred less culturally-bound images but I may just be a hopeless recluse. (Did you want a period at the end of "Donations are appreciatd,"?) I also would have liked something else at the end, like an answer to "Why not?" or guidance as to what she/I should be. (I have my own idea but I am curious about yours.) But, you've commented on didacticism so take it as you will. Good!

I agree with Arrow on several points. The choice of line breaks gives you impact where it is needed. The images are strong, but using brands might be a problem. This could easily be transformed by "on the corner" or "outside the store" and "ragged hat" or "sunbleached hat" (those are just the first that came to mind, you'd probably do best to come up with your own!). The ending also left me feeling as if it wasn't enough, until I realize that perhaps that empty feeling at the end emphasizes the entire piece. Great work. Evokes powerful images and questions. Best, ~ Ronda

Being invisible and yet still being tangible... what a marvelous and original idea! I like it! Always, Cat

five stars from me. i wish more poetry were like this. i love your modern approach and your plugging out from everydayness into your own insights.