Old Fashioned Roses

somethjing is lacking in this perhaps you were trying to hard as this is not you usual work I think what I feel I am missing is the nostalgic feeling Chrys

The change gave it a more nostalgic flavor ,nicley done you do have the gift of creating beustiful imagery with your words Chrys

I loved your title your language use was very good Your rhythm and pattern spacing was spot on The beginning and ending were wonderful The internal logic impeccable Now, that out of the way, what did I think of the poem....I forgot...no kidding, I really liked it. I used to watch mama fussing with her roses all the time. My step-dad, George had a white rose that was absolutely beautiful but it died within a few months after he did which I thought was kind of weird. A lovely, nostalgia filled write my friend. Respectfully, Rett: "On life; Ah such a wondrous thing, beauty and love to behold and experience! On death; I can wait to see..." Rett 2008.

Linda, the poem sparks great aesthetic feelings of the writer -very touching, indeed! You have carved the pen from your heart to write this poem. Mohammad