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Kailashana
Kailashana
Aug 01, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Jealous Lover

The air is a jealous lover
it comes between us
silence is a wicked tongue
that speaks not
for flesh and bone
and your hands have forgotten
my secret cave
yearning
for our body's bliss

Love, where did you go?

Have you wandered off to Paradise
and left me behind?



— Kailashana, Aug 01, 2008

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 10 months ago

What a fantastic metaphor

Those first two lines open the path for the rest of the poem's impression. Honestly, Anna, I am so enthralled by that image that you could probably have written your grocery list after it and I wouldn't have noticed. Best, ~ Ronda
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 10 months ago

Smiles Ronda, The air is a

Smiles Ronda, The air is a jealous lover it comes between us mangoes lots of mangoes laundry detergent for delicate undies razor blades dog and slim the kitty down food kitty litter the clumping kind a new blend of coffee at an exorbitant phrice a great man with ____________ good nite dear. ~a p
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 10 months ago

You just made my morning.

You just made my morning. That was beautiful! *wipes a tear* love ~ Ronda P.S. I read your comment after Peter's, and must agree. (or just copy Peter by mentioning his comment in mine - LOL) There are friends that I've known online for 9 years, some I have met, some not, but the friendships are just as real and precious as any others in my life - sometimes more so! Ah, the wonders of technology.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Anna...

hope all is well with you... Ronda is right, the first two lines were really good... but I liked the rest of it too.. glad you are here... Richard
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

this is good

Smiles:) Barbara silence has a wicked tongue great line here, really touched me
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rider68

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Anna

Loved this, clever creative and as always very thoughtful......... But i have to comment on your offering on the back of Ronda's comment..... Such imagination loved the grocery take......witty and so very good, You seem to always amaze me, really love your writing and general remarks and comments, Be well and take care Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 10 months ago

This Net thingy, this matrix

This Net thingy, this matrix of light is something else, how quickly we see into one another's hearts and form bonds. Who would have thought we can touch one another at the source? I think of all *poets* I have known you and Arvind the longest. How are you Peter? Peace Now. Love Always. ~A
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Darya

17 years 10 months ago

Jealous Lover is a pain in

Jealous Lover is a pain in the neck that one should avoid forever beautiful work ....Anna I am looking forward to read more works of yours ......I may stop by on your old posts here and read those as well .........