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YOU AND I

YOU AND I

  I could see the shadows merging as one Under the silver crescent moon Stretching forth her luring hand Beckoning to the northern star This night must be illuminated   The strong westerly breeze of the coast Swept on the sandy Gambian beach Blowing hard on human and huts Above the white carpet of sandy shore Drawing the feeling and sounds together   And in the detached mood of anger Caused by an offending story About things that are past and gone You whispered into my ear ‘Why spoil a beautiful evening outing’   The cloudy sky must not eclipse our love As eventide brought forth warmth

The pulsating rhythm of nature called for embrace

We could hear the waves lapping to the shore

And the sea beckoning for a swim   Like twins swimming in the ocean of the womb

The luring power of the sea submerged our beings

Reminding us the common source of all And out of the blue waters of the Atlantic I found the true meaning of love
— t. reflexion, Jul 29, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Country/Region: NGA

Favorite Poets: Inspired by an article in an old manuscript , It reads:, AXIOMS OF PERFECTION, In the physical order – In the realization of the dream of beauty, In the moral order – In the realization of the dream of love, In the intellectual order – In the realization of dream of poetry, In the spiritual order – In the realization of the dream of the mystics

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Critiques

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 10 months ago

Hello

I love this quietly thoughtful piece. It has a dreamy qualitity to it. Nicely done with pretty images. Always, Cat
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years 10 months ago

Thank you

Thank you for reading You and I. It brings back to mind the beginning of a new reality that I witnessed fifteen years ago.
SV

Sam Vargo

17 years 10 months ago

A bit wordy but very nice, indeed -

You have nice imagery here. You do well in watercolors in pastel. It's a bit wordy and could use some thoughtful pruning but it's still a nice poem. You and I is always better than You and You or I and I, Me and Me or the omega and the omega....
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easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Very beautiful

The imagery got me sagging at my knees.Very good write.Thanks.