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Respect For Quiet Human Grief

He's only weeping, leave him be
He doesn't need arms or blankets around him
He is weeping
He's only weeping, leave him be

There's a silence and a purity hanging in the air
Seconds are crisp
Frozen, solitary moments
Perfect models of viciousness
Of pain
Of loss--

A single rose
Vibrant and bleeding;
An empty field
Quiet, barren and lonely

The silence
Punctuated only by tiny whimpers
Seems to beg to be broken
But on a closer look
Has a greater need to exist
Than all the stars
In all the skies
On all the nights combined,
Quiet in their vigilance and purpose

He is weeping
He's only weeping, leave him be.





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prayersbyPatty

17 years 9 months ago

Wow

This is sooo true cause I have been there......... You have captured the essence of loss. And the line that the grief need not be interrupted... perfect... It has its need to exist........ all I can say is this is an excellent write. Patty
Mark

Mark

17 years 9 months ago

Moving

I felt like I was at a wake and all was quiet but one man by himself weeping. Quite an experience here, Alobar. Mark
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 9 months ago

I think this is great

Smiles:) Barbara As for your question i think the poem has two part grief and if you remove the first bit it will stand alone beautifully, i think. Together it is still a excellent write.
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

wow

What'd you do with the real Alobar? This writing is so unlike you, and it's a very moving piece. Any way you keep this will work out fine, in all honesty. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ "The toilets at a local police station have been stolen. Police say they have nothing to go on..." - Ronnie Barker
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Alobar

17 years 9 months ago

What DID I do with the real

What DID I do with the real Alobar!? He's gotta be around here somewhere! I've decided to leave the poem as is, the imagery of the first bit works for me in setting the mood, and I don't think it's overkill. Now I have to sit down and wonder, what is my writing normally like.....? Alobar (Just my two cents, spend them on gum if you wish.)
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 9 months ago

Alobar

Your poem reminds me so very much of one of my favorite Tom Petty songs, "Only A Broken Heart" I have to say that your poem moved me almost to tears. Leave it just as it is it is very poignant that way, IMHO. http://www.elyrics.net/read/t/tom-petty-lyrics/only-a-broken-heart-lyrics.html Always, Cat
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bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Alobar

This is a wonderful poem! Congradulations. Brian