once in heaven ...

I meta mor phosis
monikered Moses
half-bent over roses
grown out of focus
suffering kyphosis
a quart of neurosis
and a touch---
just a touch, mind you---
of horrid psychosis

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Barbara Writes

17 years 9 months ago

Chuck

Smiles:) Barbara Well written short piece.

barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Wow! are you ...

quick. Why, I barely got this posted. (To you, smiles right back!) Thanx again, Chuck

easylife_2

17 years 9 months ago

Great short one

I really like the rhyming,but meaning seems a bit obscure could you please expantiate.Thanks

barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

your understanding a tad if you appreciate that Moses is a reference to the biblical Moses. You know, the one of the Old Testament. Blasphemy's sharply intended. (After all, when alive my father was a minister, which of course grants me certain rights in such regard.) Thanx, Chuck

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

Nice!

Might you describe what a mor phosis looks like? I've never seen one. Are they small and cute enough to keep as pets? I like this one, Chuck, short-n-sweet! :~) ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ "As I was going up the stair, I met a man who was not there, he wasn't there again today, I wish that man would go away!"

barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Hold on a second!

I'm still looking at the critter. Stuck right now in hopes that at length I can find accurate language to describe 'im. Thanx, Chuck

rider68

17 years 9 months ago

Hi Chuck

This is quite something, would i be right in a recent contra-taunt, a very thoughtful encapsulation, quite brilliantly put together my friend, very well done, Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Thanx, Peter

Appreciate your reading/commenting. Further explanation/clarification of the piece's gleanable from my next comment, below. At least I think so. Yours, chuck

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

well, if you as me,

well, if you ask me, you blasphemed in the last scene of all dreams hardly over any rhyme or reason, just a hunch not to get your knickers in any sort of bunch, no act of mean or treason. ;-) Anna

barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Your hunch here ...

is so right on. Yours, Chuck PS: See my comment above in response to easylife. (And my knickers hang just right. At least for the moment. I do recognize that things/life/knickers come usually Saran-wrapped in a state of flux.)