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IKnowNoBox
Jul 20, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Naked Breathe

 your exposer is contrived
those garments scrapes
when will you concede
to common adornments?

that medallion is misused
as well as those shoes
why make a statement ?

it is what everyone wears
fad, hip, and flare
sport your sleazy garb
among our pressed duds
How dare you
Ragged One!
— IKnowNoBox, Jul 20, 2008

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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VAMPIREBLONDE

18 years ago

I like that poem…it

I like that poem...it reminds me of people misuseing a title or an image. Not quite sure what you meant in it, but it reaches my imagination anyway.
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Hi David...

It sounds to me like you are talking to our illustrious youth and their taste of fashion.. enjoyed the read...
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IKnowNoBox

18 years ago

Thanks Richard

It has a few pokes at those who wear costumes, and poke those who are more casual without costume. In ink, Dabbler
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

18 years ago

interesting

I, too thought this was about today's youth - didn't even think to relate it to costumes (though I suppose some of the crap today's kids wear ARE costumes!) Nice job. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ "As I was going up the stair, I met a man who was not there, he wasn't there again today, I wish that man would go away!"
LC

Lenny of Cohen

18 years ago

Clothes for thought!

I enjoyed this poem,and it reminded me of my Mum who always shouted at me for being scruffy!YEP!I was!And I got it to a fine art form,especially when I grew a beard - my Mum refused to allow me into her house!It shows how people can be affected by what is worn,and what isn't!I myself am a scruffy long haired poet(still! - sorry Mum!!!),and will always remain so! Great piece!Well dressed too! LoC
LC

Lenny of Cohen

18 years ago

Maybe

we should have a Most Scruffy Poet of The Year Award!!! Lenny smiling is nice!
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barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

Hey!

Scruffy's in beholder's eye Makes her blink and scratch Oh, my! But favor's done to such a one By careless saint: the scruffy son Thanx, box: You've made my day; Now I'll go out, commence to play! Yours, Chuck

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