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Outside is where the hurting world is
advertisers and other world destroyers
ignorant fools who believe what they are told
for mental comforts sake
Climate change is
“just a cyclic thing”
“lies told by tree hugging hippies”.

Die slowly with your children.

Inside is little comfort
I spread my memes not my genes,
but I will die slowly with you,

because of you.

 

— weirdelf, Jul 17, 2008

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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poewriter58

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

Short sweet and to the point deeply and profoundly stated. Chrys
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

thank you Chrys

exactly what I intended, with a little pointed mayhem along the way. cheers, Jess T.
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CheeseBreeder

17 years 10 months ago

Right Back At You

Wow. And you thought mine was boring and a waste of space. I mean, look buddy. I obviously have a different way of poetry to you. Don't bitch about it okay? Because you don't know me or what I stand for. And judging by your photo your about 60. I'm a lot younger than you. Shouldn't you be encouraging young, blossoming writers who aren't quite "experienced" as you? You obviously have no talent, and definetely no compassion towards others. END.
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rider68

17 years 10 months ago

I Had To Jump In - Right Back At You

If you feel aggrieved due to a comment, then don't post, this is a poetry workshop Not a bleeding hearts forum, go find somewhere else, I read your offering, and thought Jess made fair points, your post was hardly life changing, and since when does age stake a claim to the rights and wrongs, And to make a judgement on some-one you know nothing about, or taken the time to read any other works via him, makes your remarks all the more curt, Here's some honest advice, shut your mouth, go read some works being produced, then take a long hard look at yourself, Making personal remarks publicly, isn't the way to encourage friendship, the right thing to have done would have to pm him, which you can do with me, if you so choose to take this further, ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jess Can only agree with Chrys, very well written, Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Rett

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Nice one Jess

Short and got your feelings across. I respect that also. Respectfully, Rett: Nancy Astor: “Sir, if you were my husband, I would give you poison.” Churchill: “If I were your husband I would take it.”
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

Not just feelings

There has got to be fire with this much smoke, I've done the research, not just listened to Green alarmists. I listen to everyone, sort and evaluate. Check out who is paying them especially. Learnt a thing or two from your "Big Evil Oil". cheers, Jess T.
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Leon

17 years 10 months ago

Meming mime :-)

Hi Jess I like such powerful and simple poems! Kind regards Leon PS: Wouldn't an apostrophe after comfort on L4 make it easier to read? Don't know if it was intended to be like you have written it.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

ta Leon,

you mean a comma after comfort? No, I have only used periods for punctuation in the rest of it, comma may work but this is more stylistically consistent. cheers, Jess T.
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

Smiles:) Barbara Mayhem yes, but a heartfelt, well written poetry.
dhruv

dhruv

17 years 10 months ago

Maybe outside is the only

Maybe outside is the only place that will save you when your insides itch so bad, and something tells me you are one who would go to truly high levels to kill your itches. I simply am in love with the hidden sarcasm, it pinches where it hurts in all the right ways. Very well written, short, and witty as always! Noticing you always get the last laugh Laughing, Dhruv
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

ssshhh Drruv,

the last laugh is only fun if no-one blows your cover. How would you feel if I revealed to the world that you are Peter Parker? chuckles, Jess
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 9 months ago

I get this

the truth is outside, we have but to look around. The world is struggling to live. Well done Jess. Dana
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 8 months ago

Jess

Yes... I'm finally getting around to earlier works.... Give me a minute to squash my own personal opinions of global warming down... ok - the write is very good, concise, and you message is brought across well. Really liked the title, too. Well done. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- "If you've ever emptied the back of your pickup truck by driving backward really fast and slamming on the brakes, you might be a redneck" - Jeff Foxworthy Bill Engvall: "that's how we moved"
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 8 months ago

Oh, well done ma'am

as you know I am constitutionally incapable of squashing down my personal opinions, don't even try any more. I'm glad you appreciated my craft but you know I'm always happy to jump in boots and all for a good dust-up. cheers, Jess