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Gentle Journey
gentle journey
he caught the distant echo
of her laughter,
borne on the humming current
in the bustling hall,
of the crowded indoor shopping mall.
her sweet melodic voice
was music to his ravenous ears,
as he was alone and starving
for the beauty that was hers.
when she had tired
of window browsing and
visiting with her friend,
who walked and talked
comradely at her side,
he followed them,
(as they said their good-byes
and parted ways)
as if smitten or obsessed.
in the dawning of the twilight
he matched her pace
stride for stride and
step by repetitive step.
then, in the frosted evening air
she sat down on a park bench,
of designer metal and wood
to rest and catch her breath.
he summoned his courage,
catching up with her
closing the distance
excusing himself,
he asked her permission
to seat himself in her proximity.
a pleasant conversation
was engaged by both
as they smiled reciprocally
enjoying the others company.
she never felt the clawing heat of his hunger
or sensed his need and longing
for the touch of human kindness,
as she had her own similar needs.
Critiques
Rett
17 years 10 months ago
Cat
Candlewitch
17 years 10 months ago
:)
Barbara Writes
17 years 10 months ago
Cat
Candlewitch
17 years 10 months ago
Barbara
weirdelf
17 years 10 months ago
Sometimes on this site I feel I can't bear to read another poem
Candlewitch
17 years 10 months ago
Jess
rider68
17 years 10 months ago
Cat what A Gem
Candlewitch
17 years 10 months ago
Thank you, Peter. I’m glad
themoonman
17 years 10 months ago
Hi Cat...
Candlewitch
17 years 10 months ago
Thanks Richard
barbsdad2003
17 years 10 months ago
For some reason I'll set aside for possible later analysis ...
Candlewitch
17 years ago
:)
seabhac
16 years 8 months ago
Delightful
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
hello Liz
ziggy
16 years 8 months ago
gentle journey
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
thanks
hugo la rosa
16 years 8 months ago
Dear Cat:
Candlewitch
16 years 8 months ago
:)