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three days before your birthday ...


I thought I'd find a card
for under 50 cents.

I didn't.

I thought I'd send you one.
I didn't.

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 9 months ago

Short and not so sweet, Chuck

Brevity is what really gives this piece weight. The finality of both the last line and the message made me read it three times, just to feel that punch at the end. ~ Ronda
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barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Thanx, Ronda

Thought I'd throw a little shady humor into the mix here. A fun write it was. And done only this morning. So it's fresh. But ... refrigerate after opening, please. Yours, Grinning-out-loud Chuck
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 9 months ago

Chuck

I don't know, my friend. This doesn't tickle me like your work normally does. It kind of left me with a "that's it?" feeling. Not sure how to expand on it, though, as I'm not sure what your original message was. Will think on it some more. Sorry, friend. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~"Save the trees, wipe your ass with an owl..." ~"The grass may be greener on the other side, but it still needs to be mowed..."
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

Well I understand...

maybe its a man thing... but I always forget birthdays. My wife started collecting rubber stamps for card making along with ink and empty cards.. often on the day I am making a card but I usually get the card done... usually is stressed because its still me that has to do it... Richard
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rider68

17 years 9 months ago

Cards = Nightmares

Hi Chuck, Like Richard, cards plague me, never finding either the right one, or making enough time, the thought constantly in the back of the head when the occasion arises, It's dammed if you do, and dammed if you don't, the wife has a face like a slapped arse, for days, Be well, loved you thought, Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~