Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
Jul 18, 2008
⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
trees
elegant trees
sway in the breeze
I wish them luck;
they wait for ... bees
(My fingers crossed,
I hoped someone
might see the sadness
in this piece.
Kudos to moonman,
who got it.
Ah, well, I'd've just
continued editing from
day to day till my larger
meaning came as
plain as long noses
on short faces.
Next rendition would've
read:
elegant trees
sway in the breeze
I wish them luck:
they wait acute
in vain for ... bees)
Comments
Kailashana
17 years 9 months ago
bees buzzing with the weight
autumnphoenix
17 years 9 months ago
I like the simplicity of
Rett
17 years 9 months ago
Nicely done
RSScheerer
17 years 9 months ago
trees
barbsdad2003
17 years 9 months ago
I daresay ...
RSScheerer
17 years 9 months ago
due to weight
Barbara Writes
17 years 9 months ago
A tree song
themoonman
17 years 9 months ago
Hi Chuck...
barbsdad2003
17 years 9 months ago
Yes!
Sinbadthesailorman
17 years 9 months ago
Just on way up here to the Berrie
barbsdad2003
17 years 9 months ago
Thanx, sinb ...