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trees


elegant trees
sway in the breeze

I wish them luck;
they wait for ... bees

(My fingers crossed,
I hoped someone
might see the sadness
in this piece.
Kudos to moonman,
who got it.

Ah, well, I'd've just
continued editing from
day to day till my larger
meaning came as
plain as long noses
on short faces.

Next rendition would've
read:

elegant trees
sway in the breeze

I wish them luck:

they wait acute
in vain for ... bees)

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Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 9 months ago

bees buzzing with the weight

bees buzzing with the weight of flowers under wings ;-) miles of summer smiles...Barb's Dad...
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 9 months ago

I like the simplicity of

I like the simplicity of this piece. Though it is short it speaks a great deal. I could see a breezy summer day with buzzing bees. Great Dana
Rett

Rett

17 years 9 months ago

Nicely done

Bees Make me Sneeze But this Poem is The Bees Knees Well done sir! Rett: Nancy Astor: “Sir, if you were my husband, I would give you poison.” Churchill: “If I were your husband I would take it.”
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 9 months ago

trees

The image of the swaying trees and the personification given to them (do trees really wait?) make this simple piece not so simple. As always, your unique voice stands out among the rest. ~ Ronda
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barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

I daresay ...

that when absent bees don't come, trees must surely wait. Thanx again, Chuck
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 9 months ago

A tree song

Smiles:) Barbara Nicely done. Trees swaying in the breeze waits for bees great image
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 9 months ago

Hi Chuck...

weren't we just talking about bees recently... yes, no choice but to wait, no bees equals much less polination... world changing event.. short and to the point.. elegantly said. Richard
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barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Yes!

Moonman, hey, you got my very point. Thanx. And thanx again to all. Chuck
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

17 years 9 months ago

Just on way up here to the Berrie

I saw Only two of the little things buzzing by one lone Danny-loin as I kept walking I seen the young boy behind me stomp them into them ground I thought I should of said somthing but that would only have made me a hipocret for I murdder thousands in my youth after being stung thrice in one day but it's true we need these insects they do almost 90% of the pollenating I've been told a great loss to the world save the Bees Please! and the Whales we are now In a time of tribulation who has eyes let them see but more important he who has a mind due something with it Donnie/ Sinbad
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barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Thanx, sinb ...

Appreciate your comment. And I esp. like your agitating for "he who has a mind due something with it." Yours, Chuck