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themoonman
themoonman
Jul 13, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

No Nets (a nonet)

Wish there weren't loose nets in the oceans
left there to tie up and kill life
the fishing industry blues
what if the fish were you
left there struggling
or just caught in
forgotten
tangled
nets.
— themoonman, Jul 13, 2008

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

18 years ago

Richard

Aha! couldn't resist the nonet! Can't say I necessarily agree with the topic matter, as a lot of people depend on fishing, but I can see how it could be unfair to the fish as well. Nice job. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~"Save the trees, wipe your ass with an owl..." ~"The grass may be greener on the other side, but it still needs to be mowed..."
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Hi Jess K...

obviously I didn't get the point across that I wanted... I'm not opposed to fishing either, I like fish.. I saw something the other day about all of the nets that fisherman have had to let go for one reason of another.. our oceans are full of loose nets...just left there to tangle up and choke the bottom.. oh well .. I tried.. Richard
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Ashfae

18 years ago

No,

I think I got your point. Not against fishing in general but the waste left by it. Love the play on nonet no nets. I think this one's finished. Solid poem.
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Thank you...

for your comment, I still am not quite satisfied with the poem, in particular the line with four syl.. but I was stuck, so I posted it like it was hoping for an idea but it has alluded me. I thank you again for your comments and glad to see you here on the board, I believe you have insight to offer and it is much welcomed... Richard
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rahbar

18 years ago

Point of view

Hello Richard...What a great poetical comment you have made...very very subtly..you are asking every one to look at the world from other's point of view. very intelligent work. Rahbar.
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Hi Rahbar...

What a great review for an old country boy like me, I thank you for seeing into this piece and appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.. Richard
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

18 years ago

nets

I understood your poem. I got the mental image of dolphins trapped in nets set for tuna. Or people caught in nets in the ocean of life, with no one to care.
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Hi Linda...

thank you for that wonderful comment, I'm glad you got something from the poem, that is really what writing is about...isn't it. The dolphins... I wasn't going there but I do love how our words can make each individual see something totally differant.. thank you for visiting and seeing into words from your poets eye... Richard
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Atticus

17 years 11 months ago

tip of the hat

Clever marriage of words and structure. Quite enjoyable. Tip of the fishing hat to you good Sir.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you...

for digging up one of my poems and commenting... I appreciate your reading it and thank you for the tip... undeserving as it is but thank you .. I really wasn't quite happy with this piece yet.. just haven't gone back yet.. sometimes late at night I'll have my mind on something else and a line will pop in my head and I know where it goes... I guess I'm waiting for that to happen... Richard

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