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Unfinished Business


"Mom and her, they went shoppin'.
She bought her somethin' that she didn't ---"

"Hold up," I said. "Too many pronouns.
Tell me nouns," I added.

"Like what?"

"Who is 'she' and who is 'her'?"

"Now you interrupt me, I forget
what it is I'm gonna say."

"There you go with pronouns," I said.
"Again."

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Ashfae

17 years 9 months ago

Oh,

I like this. I like this a lot. You say so much with a few well-chosen words.
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barbsdad2003

17 years 9 months ago

Thanx ...

for the visit/comment. As a matter of fact, I do prefer brevity over length. Yours, Chuck PS: As a point of possible (additional) humor here, notice the author (i.e., myself) chooses to speak in pronoun too.