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weirdelf
weirdelf
Jul 12, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The process

 

From the notion

his eyes light up
this just might work
he starts

Through the motion

gathers together all he needs
works with gusto
setbacks and challenges
he nears despair
but slogs it out
then the time comes
he steps back
it’s done

To reflection

the work is released
into the world
he allows some small pride
then the slide
his creation
is out of control

It is now part of your mind not his.
That's me, so shoot me.
it’s yours.

 

— weirdelf, Jul 12, 2008

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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MISSMVB

17 years 11 months ago

I loved it!!!

I thought this was great. I am creative in so many different ways and so I found this poem quite refreshing. I mean the life of an idea and the freeform you used to put those thoughts down was my own style. I've just submitted one a few minutes ago. And two on general poetry forum . Would love your input. Happy writing. MISSMVB
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Hi Jess...

the process... I know it well. I have been working on a piece with similiar content.. once released it could flop like a fish on the shore, but your piece is understood...enjoyed the places this took me... Richard
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zarul

17 years 11 months ago

BEAUTIFUL POEM

WOW, ALTHOUGH I'VE TO READ THID POEM SEVERAL TIMES TO GET THE MEANING OF IT, BUT THEN I REALIZED IT IS A VERY NICE POEM. WELL DONE.
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Majeedahs_Umi

17 years 11 months ago

nice!!!

everyone can relate to the process in oneway or another... well done be blessed, brandi
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rider68

17 years 11 months ago

G'day Mate

Jess As always a thoughtful write, this must cross most of our minds, prior to a posting, Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

Smiles:) Barbara Children are like that, two left, one one the road with my brother in-law so driving us crazy, one left at home (Girl-19). she only one can reason. Parent hard work, but when its done we love em. Nice work
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Ashfae

17 years 10 months ago

Exhilirating.

Oh yeah. I both love and dread that feeling, when you let it go and it stops being yours and belongs to anyone who experiences it. "It" being anything made. Is it hell or the best part, I can't tell. Like the title, and the "From the notion through the motion to reflection" interludes very much.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

ta Barbara, Ashfae

After writing "Watermana" I went into a 3 month depression, could hardly get out of bed, other times it is exhilarating to release a work into the world and watch it create havoc. Sometimes I nearly get a panic attack, "OMG, did I really say that?" Do you think this might work better in the first person? cheers, Jess
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

Smiles:) Barbara you write really good poetry try it and see. I'm sure it will turn out great. you may like creating havoc, but it show you care.
Jonathan Moore

Jonathan Moore

17 years 10 months ago

Very nice

and so very true. Everything we write must survive on it's own in the harsh, cruel world. This reminds me, in intent, of a Philip K Dick short story, The Preserving Machine. Well done. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

ta Jon,

good to see you round. I love Phillip K. Dick but don't think I've read that one, will check it out. cheers, Jess
Rett

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

You punched out all the feelings I and probably most people have when it comes time to post one of our writes. Well done and congrats on spotlight. Rett: Nancy Astor: “Sir, if you were my husband, I would give you poison.” Churchill: “If I were your husband I would take it.”
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pinksheep

17 years 10 months ago

This

read as smooth as a dream to me-I like the format and the ending SUPERB-
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 10 months ago

The process

Very nice progression, both in the structure of the poem and its story. In the end, does our work still belong to us? Oh, and I see no one has answered your question, but I think you should leave it in third person. It somehow allows more readers to identify with the process. ~ Ronda
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gumpymonkey

17 years 10 months ago

i likes

but i would slam one more line on the bottom, just to let your reader know who is really talking to them...at the last second. how about,"Not mine!" or not. :) -Daniel
autumnphoenix

autumnphoenix

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

You captured the thoughts, feelings and stifling fear some creators have with their work. Your choice of words great in their discription of the process. Thanks for giving it a visual life. Dana
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

Good one. Works with gusto and nears despair speaks to the creation process and when it it done it is a part of you
Mark

Mark

17 years 10 months ago

Yea the last line

You become a part of me (be you aware or not like it or not) I like it ! Seems that after you share the first few with the understanding you're losing it the more easy it becomes lol Mark
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 10 months ago

Jess

From the notion Through the motion To reflection It's yours Beautiful words here Jess~
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rahbar

17 years 9 months ago

Creative notion.

Hello Weirdelf...a controlled creation....an encouraging poem...enjoyed. Rahbar.
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frangipangi

17 years 9 months ago

ahh, the process

Hi Jess, BANG! Your alive!! I know a little about processes. You, my friend know some well. Great write, thank you Jess you give so much. Yours Always, Fran Like a ball in a groove Pop! that booger jumped right out found it's own way right into my head BANG! Your dead I've got it that ball my groove its my move caught it! it's gone Just shoot me already NEXT!
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 9 months ago

ta Frangi

haven't heard from you for a while, cheers, Jess