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Closing Time

I don't want to do anything,
maybe I'll watch t.v.
One hundred plus channels
but there is nothing on for me.

Ambiguous is my middle name,
where am I...
indiscretions I can never leave.

I'll have to go to work,
can't afford to give in,
but if I could...

I wouldn't leave my comfortable commode
I'd listen to the traffic report and never go
I'd sit here alone
turn off the phone
take one last look
and close my book.
— themoonman, Jul 09, 2008

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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Rett

Rett

18 years ago

Hey, Wouldn't we all!

I like it except for the commode. Sit there too long and your legs go to sleep. Never mind how I know. *L* Loved it my friend! Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Thank you Rett...

yes, it doesn't matter how comfy they are does it...lol thanks for visiting my poem.. Richard
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barbsdad2003

18 years ago

Bathroom fun's ...

more fun than most can appreciate. Thanx for posting here a delightful piece. your flashes of brilliance gleam bright, bringing with them rare insight Yours, Chuck PS: If you opt to change there's to there is (in your first stanza), you'll up the meter quotient.
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Hi Chuck...

I thank you for your uplifting comments... and I opted to fix the word for the meter quotient... thanks again and again.. Richard

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