Candlewitch

Jul 09, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Hush

inveterately

silence was

her standing reply

this shroud of habit

that she'd brought

firmly established

from days and nights

long since gone by

and the hours

whiled away to naught

her habits were hardened

confirmed and ingrained

incurable

the verdict came back

she became seasoned

in her chronic response

silence was her haven

the sweet retreat

called incommunicado

in which she would get by

mute by her own choice

that she never found

the sound of her untried voice

echoed the inexpressible

in her beseeching eyes

she cowered

hiding from all the lies

finding a quiet courage

growing in her soul

the child born of silence

speaking volumes

with her midnight eyes

*lyrics

— Candlewitch, Jul 09, 2008

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Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Critiques

pinksheep

17 years 11 months ago

An

unsual interesting subject you have chosen to write for your lyrics, to me this lyrical piece is intense, and shows to me that you have great insight into silence- I am sorry that i can not say more to justify the intensity of this piece, my words wane withering in woe wretched and wrought, and i use to much illteration if i have chosen the right word, for what it is called-

Candlewitch

17 years 11 months ago

Hi Pink

Thank you for reading my lyrics and sharing your thoughts with me. I often use alliteration, too, as I am a big fan of that style writing. Always, Cat

barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

nicely wrought

These words--- the child born of silence speaking volumes with her midnight eyes ---themselves speak volumes. I don't think I've seen "midnight" used so meaningfully. Brings the image sharp to brain. Thanx, Chuck PS: Love your style, love your choice of subject ...

Candlewitch

17 years 11 months ago

Thanks Chuck

I always enjoy reading your comments and ideas. Thanks for reading. Always, Cat

Janice Pearce

17 years 10 months ago

Hush

Cat just doing some catching up on my reading and happened upon this. What a jewel! This is one of my favorites posted by you~

Candlewitch

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Janice

Thanks for reading, I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Always, Cat

Electric Blue

17 years 6 months ago

Hush

hello Kat Silence was her sweet retreat Kat This phrase haunts me so. Awesome my friend electricblue

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Maggie

I don't know how I missed this comment, but I was probably ill at the time. I am sorry it has taken me so long to respond. Thank you, dear friend. Always, Cat

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Cat:

Probably we'll never know what is it that the child with midnight eyes is hiding, or lie about, but I guess there is no need to know. Whatever the action or the words, she has some pretty little trouble with the eerie word: Incommunicado! That silence is in itself a blessing in disguise. Will she be saved that way from herself?! Great poem! Sincerely, Hugo

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

hello Hugo

You bring up all good questions that one might ask in reading this poem. It is mostly about an abused girl who hides behind silence. Thank you for reading and commenting. Always, Cat

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Thank you Cat:

Everything makes sense now. I hope she is receiving all the love and the help she might need. My best regards, Hugo

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Hugo

(she was me) but the poem embodies others who suffer, too. (I got help, and I also helped myself by trying to understand why) Thank you, Always, Cat