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Linda Moses
Linda Moses
Jul 06, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

SECRETS

Little girl lost,
though in plain sight.

Hid well my secrets,
though one knew my plight.

She looked away and
helped me not.

She was my mother.
Had she forgot?

— Linda Moses, Jul 06, 2008

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Region, Country: Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: rethinking this. have recently started reading the works of some of the greats, I will comment later

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poewriter58

18 years ago

Linda

may I suggest the use of forgot instead of forgotten it would flow better with the rest of the poem Short but to the point. It tugs at the heart strings good write Chrystalie
Linda Moses

Linda Moses

18 years ago

sECRETS

When I first wrote this poem, I had used the word"forgot", but then I worried about the grammer, and used "forgotten". I did change it back to "forgot" Thanks for the help.
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zarul

18 years ago

wow, short yet deeply touching

about mother abandoning their children really common in today's world wit a lil' improvement and correction, da construction and flow could be better nice work

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