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Him & Whispering Wind.

Him & Whispering Wind

 

Listen to the whispering wind

it may have a message for you

send your thoughts soaring along

they may find solace for you.

 

It is not entirely dark

some light still left over there

seek what you might be seeking

it may be there for you.

 

Stop worrying for him

he is the master of his own destiny

heed the warning of the wind

it will be good for you.

 

He left you on your own

and turned back on his word

may be in his denial

lay the truth for you.

 

You can see the look on his face

bewildered, confused and desperate

if you know the real state of his mind

that may be enough for you.

 

Wish him the best and

pray for him through your soul

may be in his salvation

that door will open for you.

 

By:-

Rahbar.

 

 

 


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prayersbyPatty

17 years 10 months ago

Nice Poem

Really like the wisdom and conviction of your words in this poem. I like rhythmic poems, but this one was well thought out and put to pen. Patty
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

17 years 10 months ago

I’m sorry but the subject

I'm sorry but the subject matter seems over used and did not hold my attention. Just because this isn't "my cup of tea" doesn't mean that others won't like it. You have put effort into this poem and that shows through. Always, Cat
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rahbar

17 years 10 months ago

Honest comment.

Hello..Cat..a very frank and boldly honest comment..rightly appreciated...please send me a least used ' subject matter' I will try to work upon it..please comment on my other poems too...thank you.. Rahbar.
Rett

Rett

17 years 10 months ago

Rahbar

Well thought out and executed. If I may be so bold, I have one suggestion. This particular couple of lines did not seem exactly correct to me. may be in his denial lay the truth for you. I would personally write is as... maybe in his denial lies the truth for you This is just a suggestion and you do not have to follow it. You may have meant something totally different. I think it is a very very good poem. Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill
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rahbar

17 years 10 months ago

sincere suggestion.

Hello Rett...real thanks for your encouraging comment...I will ponder over your suggestion .. 'what about forties and fifties'...some one may have said some thing about them too. rahbar.
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amalzamani

17 years 10 months ago

For You

...capitalizing "Him" made me think, at first, that it's about God!...so I'm not very sure about the title. I like the rhythm created in this poem....and the refrain "for you" enhances the tenderness of such subject. perhaps you can call it "For You" enjoyable read...thank you Rahbar!
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rahbar

17 years 10 months ago

Reply to your comment on "Him & Whispering Wind."

Hello Amalzamani...you have correctly pointed out the weakness in the title........'For you' would have been a better one...I may end up changing it....real thanks for your comment and suggestion. Rahbar.
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 10 months ago

Rahbar...

although I thought this to be a good poem I felt the bold type un-needed... your words either will make it here for their own strength or not.. the bold type is a distraction from your poem. and... I'm left wondering who this is to... I'm thinking a son has gone wayward and this is to the mother...but.. it is vague. which sometimes is a good thing in poetry but in this poem you seem to have an agenda and leaving something out...does that make sense? Maybe it is me.. you have some good comments here. Richard
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rahbar

17 years 10 months ago

Perfect approach.

Hello Richard...I am amazed at your power of understanding...Yes..it is about my first born ..who is in all practical sense lost to me ...I really.. really appreciate your comment.Thanks.! Rahbar.
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zarul

17 years 10 months ago

NICE POEM

BUT I GUESS U DONT NEED THE BOLD UR POEM WILL BE BETTER IF U KEEP IT IN NORMAL FONTS CONGRATS