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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Jul 02, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Can’t See Pass the Clouds

A mind cleared of schmuck
that keeps the senses dull
has a path made clean
for understanding to the full

A smirky utterance
that keeps comfort away
fills the heart with sadness
with every word betrayed

As the sunsets
reality creeps ever closer
as pain makes humble
each imposer


— Barbara Writes, Jul 02, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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poewriter58

17 years 11 months ago

barbara

that keep(s) add an "s" here how about with every word betrayed? reads smoother reality creep(s) add the "s" Nice writing Barbara your writing is changing for the better may I say. Chrystalie
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

chrys

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for the suggestion it does read better and smoother.
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

I loved it

Sad, somewhat melancholy, but a good write. I do have one question. About the title, is it "Can't See, Pass the Clouds" or "Can't See Past the Clouds"? Rett: The perfect summer day is when the sun is shining, the wind is blowing, the birds are singing and the lawnmower is broken. "James Dent"