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An Empty Revolver

mine was a horror writers role
to make a plot
one with a vicious villain
a seemingly helpless victim
one that reached out
to all those crisis resources
only to be turned away
for lack of community funds
friends that under played their role
a few nights on their couch
to let her abusive villain cool off
or rehearse his come-back lines
how truly amazed he was when
she came back with a smile
or was it a smirk?
she eased into her routine role
apologetic for her lack of respect
surly he was right all along
she held her suffered pose
long enough to empty her revolver
nothing fatal at first
one to the villains gut
one to each knee
(that's three determined  shots)
then one for each "PLEASE?"
number six..Finale

— IKnowNoBox, Jun 30, 2008

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Catalina

17 years 11 months ago

*APPLAUSE*

Ooooh ooooh ooooh I loved this, lol! I'm excited like I just watched a scene in a great movie, which it appears is what is intended. The flow, the rhythm, the entire storyline...fabulous!
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barbsdad2003

17 years 10 months ago

One of your ...

best pieces here. Congrats ... and thanx. Yours, Chuck PS: Makes fiction come real. Or presumably fiction. You tell it well, And it leaves a mark.
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Ashfae

17 years 10 months ago

Yikes!!

This is one of the most visual poems I've ever read; you can see it all happening so clearly. That's going to haunt me a bit. Which is a compliment. =)
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orgami

17 years 10 months ago

Action

your poems move they have action "still life #3" I grew up surrounded in a time by abuse and i have hefted revolvers and long guns and sharpened knives with whet stones studied veterans Women that is from bad bad bad relationships Loved this poem sometimes violence is neccasary
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 10 months ago

Hi David...

vivid scenes from the way of the gun... enjoyed reading this picture of yours.. Richard