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Sonnet 16 (Shards of light)

Cascades from above are falling apart
With beams stuck in trees. The abyss will fall
Into your sorrow from spirit to heart,
Until light is off, forgotten or thrall.
Crystals in heatwaves are shards, and the rain
From corners and skies will throw even worse
Its eyes over Earth; the sun with its pain
Should jump from those heights to share our curse.
The stained glass exudes like never before,
And breaks all the lives in meaningful gain;
I can’t drop myself with peace on the floor,
Yet I won’t get rest until I shall reign
Over the edge of the world in grey land
That brought sour death with flowers and sand.
— Unlight, Jun 28, 2008

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purplemoondoll

17 years 11 months ago

Your ability to keep the

Your ability to keep the flow and rhythm steady and clean is amazing. Yes this is another great write and I really enjoyed reading this. Your ability with the sonnet is excellent - I would love to see you apply this to some other forms too some time. My favourite lines are:- Crystals in heatwaves are shards, and the rain From corners and skies will throw even worse Its eyes over Earth; the sun with its pain Should jump from those heights to share our curse. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Nice, Unlight

Another demonstration of a skillfully written sonnet. Like Kaz, I would love to see you expand your talent to other forms as well. Best, Ronda