The Soldier

The poem itself could use something more, a little fine tuning if you will. As far as the reality of the man on the field, I think you nailed it like a bullet driving a tack, from a snipers smoking gun. with all due respect, friend. Mark

you catch that well. Perhaps it needs a verse to include his interaction with his fellow soldiers. Nothing major a dash of something. In ink, Dabbler

Great content here, agree with Mark's comments.

Maybe the last letter home could be revealed? An in-depth look at what this soldier faces on a daily basis confessed in a note home? Just some thoughts. I like what I see so far. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine!"

Mr Moonman I have viewed so much on U-tube and love war movies per say like "Jar Head" and something else I forget about over there In U-tube the men laugh pushed to the limits of course or are serious in their duty and line of "work" I have known many soldiers from many period battles of late in my past knowings of known this is a poignant poem when I say Laugh they are firing over the walls leting loose a volley from a rooftop to another far rooftop and bullets are zinging over their heads you can hear it on the cameras "F**k that was close buddy!! Did you hear that??" and then the laughter and then the firing over the wall again Helicopter footage "I'll buy you and ice cream cone if you can find me some bad-guys!" dispatcher "shut-up Shut-up Shut-up!!" Helo Pilot at night (They find and obliterate people from above extreme graphic but i guess he got his Ice-cream cone!) poem can use some little more work but above all a very good poem I always enjoy your in depth and sensitive writings Moonman

"we didn't know him either..: what a great line Moonman Yet they too knew him their own mothers poem in pockets Yet they Must not "Know" him or they may hesitate falter where instinct will "survive" them! I have an uncle who survived beach landings and long march through Europe to this day he still wakes up screaming he is in his eighties and despite is a good father husband brother businessman You have captured a sorrowful moment of the "truths" of war that each must deal with in their own manner and for that Moonman I greatly admire the sensitive care that you craft such subject matter !!

Compelling and overpowering emotions you evoke with this piece. I am overwhelmed by this and the powerful imagery. A great write! Always, Cat

U NOE, I JUZ CAPTIVATED BY HOW U XPRESS THE BADNESS OF WAR BOUT THE SUFFERING AND THE LOST OF SYMPATHY AMONG HUMANITY GREAT JOB