Rett

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Someplace He's Never Found

Some Place He's Never Found

A man has so many things
that he would like to say,
But doesn't oh so many times
because pride gets in the way.
He'd like to pour his feelings out,
but he'd feel less a man.
With the way that he is raised
there's no way that he can.

So he stumbles on the words
'cause he can't get them right.
Then he turns and stalks away
because his throat has gotten tight.
He leaves all the words unsaid
as a tear rolls down his cheek.
He vents his anger on the door
for the words he cannot speak.

Once again love walks away
'cause she don't understand,
The trials and tribulations
that's the makeup of a man.
She leaves him with his loneliness
and doesn't hear his cries
As he screams out his frustration
to the dark and endless skies.

He walks back into the room
where they stood an hour before,
Then turns and sadly leaves again
she's not there anymore.
He wanders off into the night
not knowing where he's bound.
He's just looking for someplace,
someplace he's never found...

— Rett, Jun 27, 2008

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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Critiques

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

Smiles:) Barbara This was truly great write. I enjoyed this immensely. The opposite of this in a man can also be damaging to a marriage when pride gets in the way. Just a observation I experience. unimportant. Your title sums it for me some men or women for that matter never find that place where they connect in understanding what the other really tries to express, need or is going through. But still we were meant to be together, so we try again. It was wonderful, but I have one tiny suggestion; she is not there nomore, may sounds better with anymore. All in all it was well written and I really felt his distress. It made me want to give him a hug just knowing his heart was with her, but she couldn't know it. Sad outcome.

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Barbara

Thank you Barbara. I see where you are talking about. I made an adjustment and then forgot to change that. I appreciate you bring it to my attention. Yes, so many times neither can really communicate how they feel because of the different ways they are raised. It is more prevalent in my generation because the man was raised to be strong, not to show his feelings and to make the living. The woman on the other hand was taught to depend on her husband and to listen to what he says, so, conflict. Making change now. Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!

Barbara Writes

17 years 11 months ago

You are welcome

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for considering my suggestions. I was raised that way and in this day and time it is a lonely world and hard one to survive. Being fragile with a strong mind tend to keep me in hot water.

DarkinAZ

17 years 11 months ago

Did you mean...

Walks away? Other than that this is a beautiful write, of the proud man, and his desire for love coexisting with his need to protect his heart. Superb write, Mark

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thanks Mark

I'm sorry for being so late in replying, Friday was a real nightmare. *LOL* Bad day. I appreciate your comments and yes, walks away. Not exactly a good ending , but too many end that way from pride and the way they were raised. That is what I was trying to convey. Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!

leonard daranjo

17 years 11 months ago

Great Piece Rett

I know the feeling. I have wrecked many a relationship precisely because of this. It is really painful when communication breaks down and one has to suffer all alone. Art in general and poetry in particular makes people realise that there really arn't many differences among them. No matter what you feel and how alone you are in that feeling, there is always someone somewhere who feels the same way. Cheers ... Leonard

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Leonard

I wrote this about you. *L* Just kidding. I have seen it happen time and again from both perspectives and almost lost myself in my younger years because of it. Yes, there is always someone just like yourself somewhere whether you are a saint or a sinner or any other connotations thereof.Thanks a lot for taking the time to read and comment. Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Rett

You hit the nail on the head and your description of the differences was right on, nicely done!

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you Janice.

Thanks Janice. I had an old man tell me once that age doesn't bring wisdom, you have just made so many mistakes you can recognize one when you see it. I am glad you liked it and I appreciate your reading and commenting. Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!

barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

A sensitive and telling ...

piece. Historically boys (who later became men) were taught---by both home and other environments---to keep their emotional straitjackets on 24/7. As well way too many experience this still in present times. I like your comment re background/prompter for this piece. Added a bit of flesh, a bit of provenance. Contributed to its reality. Thanx, Chuck

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Chuck

Thank you for reading and understanding. I am 56 and grew up in the country. That is the way we were taught. I had a hard time shucking off "most" of that archaic teaching, but I had help from a wonderful lady. Glad you read the prompter for this. It says how I got the idea for it. Most of the time I start with an idea, but have no clue how it will turn out. Hell of a thing for a writer to admit. Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!

barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

I too had much ...

of a rural/countrified upbringing---and that in a Bible-thumping Christian Fundamentalist context/culture. (Which of course in general contributed to making nationally prominent sexism even more rampantly sexist than it might've been otherwise). I like that you quote-marked the word most in your comment just above. I fear we've all of us guys been irreversibly marked indelibly by such straitjacketing childhood influences. About all we can do, I think, is intelligently tinker with ourselves from time to time in order to make adjustment in the direction of a saner world than prob'ly could possibly exist---for sure right now ... and prob'ly, too, in the future. Yours again, Chuck

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Chuck

To coin an old bible thump. Hallelujah! There are times when seemingly out of the blue it rears it's head again and I have to ruthlessly suppress it. Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!

orgami

17 years 11 months ago

I have been this man

And I have found a woman who just said "get some f**king help counselling. anger management or get the hell out of here because I cant help you on my own anymore!!!! pack your bags or pick up the phone Right Now!!!" I was tired of running I ran from four relationships kicked out of two lived for six years total on my own and its a drag sobbing and falling in your own puke or remembering putting a fist through a wall for what occasion Cause I didnt get my point across?? Mom taught us not to be beaters but lovers but we got problems and I did my time one summer and still am talking it was easier to lift the phone then pack the bag and I love this woman just something sensitive and not too judgemental I still got lots of problems but Im here working struggling to make this work because there is nothing more soul wrenching then waking up alone when your heart is breaking and you've lost hope Yah and all my freind got the crap beat out of them Strong stuff and I read books and poetry

barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

Very nice work! org ...

for comment on the fly. I'd like to see more at this site on this subject. I think men need to write about it---both for other men and for themselves (and perhaps to better inform the opposite gender concerning our (men's) virtually universal conflict(s) in the emotional realms that so affect/infect relationships). Thanx for your comment. (I'll comment further separately to Rett.) Yours, Chuck

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

orgami

We all have our problems. From early on we are taught in many ways, lots of them very subtle. We will never get rid of all of them, but hopefully we can learn enough that we can control them. It took me a very very long time to finally be happy and accept who/what I am and to control what I didn't want to be. Thanks for reading and commenting. I grew up on the streets as I left home at 13, but all in all, I didn't turn out too bad. *L* Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!

DarkinAZ

17 years 11 months ago

The cold realities...

of a child, left out in the cold, even if his choice...or not, bestowes upon him certain things, only one on the streets can learn and they have quite a pratical worth if he overcomes, his trials. He will truly become a well chisled soul and the simple childhood home just kinda goes away, never really missed, never really known...but the scales remain balanced with the steadfastness and his will to carry on. Your fellow traveler on that lonely road, Mark

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Thanks Mark

People can make of themselves what they will. I am a huge set of contradictions. The biggest of which is that I am a dreamer with my feet planted firmly in reality. I know, it doesn't seem to make sense but that is the case. Thanks friend. Rett: They say that money talks. Sadly, my wallet has laryngitis!

zarul

17 years 11 months ago

ITS A PIECE OF TRUTHE

U unegoistically reveals the nature of us, men. we tends to hide our feelings, our cries, our tears for the sake of our pride, ego and integrity. Though i am a teen and still unmarried, but i do agree that diz hideous nature of men do wreck the marriage. last of all, it is a great poem

Rob Graber

16 years 9 months ago

Dark & Endless

"She leaves him with his loneliness and doesn’t hear his cries As he screams out his frustration to the dark and endless skies." Great write, Rett!

Barbara Writes

16 years 9 months ago

Rett

I upgraded this to five stars. It is like reading it for the first time. Understanding a man. I enjoyed reading this again. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara