Confidence

A great piece. A unique observation of ones own limitless power. Admitting it is the first step. Now you have to do something about it. :) I now must read more of your work, as this is the first piece of yours I have seen and I am intrigued. If only I could rate this poem with little symbols that look like your face instead of these weak generic stars! -Daniel

Your imagery is unique and profound, I look forward to more of your work cheers, Jess

Your imagery does pull your reader in and hold the attention. I'm wondering if there is a problem with tense again in this piece, so let's look. "My hurt became a star That shined right above me, around me - suggestion: omit "right" An expanding bright sheen that Enclosed all spaces. Underneath my feet is an indistinct glass, - you change tense right here non-transparent in its thickness. Osmosis. The star filters out Everything except the bad. My own brightness fills the room. In everything I shine through. My heart is full of sadness." Looking over it, the change of tense may be appropriate. Just pointing it out to be sure that you meant for it to happen. Perhaps you could begin a second stanza with "Underneath..." so that the change, if intentional, flows better. I like this piece, it is unique. Best, ~ Ronda

Smiles:) Barbara very well written