Neopoet

Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

RSScheerer
RSScheerer
Jun 22, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

pollution - a Nonet

These blue-grey eyes descry a stark worldobserve the torture it enduressilver tears cloud porcelainonce pristine and sinlessnow tainted with proofthat nothing lastsno matterhow wetry


 
— RSScheerer, Jun 22, 2008

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Near Springfield, Illinois, USA

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Edgar Allen Poe, Merrit Malloy

More from this author

Critiques

Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

17 years 11 months ago

great one Ronda

Great Nonet as well Ronda. The idea flows exactly as the title says - the pollution saw through the "blue-grey" eyes and in the final you point out the relativity of our Universe - anything is relative ("no matter how we try"). Congratulations! best wishes, Marius
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Thank you, Marius

I appreciate your comments, especially on these structured works. This particular piece was written a year ago when I first discovered the Nonet. Best, Ronda
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 11 months ago

Wow… I DO learn something

Wow... I DO learn something new every day... And a wonderfully brilliant, sparkling clear, Nonet poem of truth you have written...Rondha. Smile. Love. Anna
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Anna

You SO funny - "Rondha" Glad I could enlighten you, dearheart. Also very happy that you enjoyed this piece. Nonets are challenging, but I find them rewarding as well. Love, Ronda
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Ronda

Just one word: Awesome, maybee two: Beautiful, maybee three:brilliant flow.
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Janice

I appreciate your word(s)..... ;) Thank you so much! ~ Ronda
B

barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

Hey there!

I may be gathering years enough to toss like chestnuts into the smolderin' fireplace, but this old dog can still learn a trick or two. Or even (on rare occasions) as many as three. When I first spotted your title, I assumed it asserted that what followed is not a sonnet. Thanx to your clarification/explanation of "nonet," I can feel a tad chagrined at the thought I would not have researched the word and would've rested instead on my very wrong (and tragically careless) assumption. Thanx again, Chuck
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Hey yourself!

Glad we straightened that out - and that you liked the piece! Wait...you did like the piece, right? ~ Ronda
B

barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

Oh, yeah

If I commented, rest assured I prob'ly liked it. Otherwise there'd be no comment. From me, anyway. Yours again, Chuck
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Just checking

Would never want to make assumptions! ;) Thanks, Chuck! Best, Ronda
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Ronda

I like Chuck's thoughts on a Nonet meaning not-a-sonnet! I, too am grateful that you clarified what it was. So many forms to learn, so little time! I liked it, and it looks like it followed the form flawlessly. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ~ "Everyone needs to believe in something. I believe I'll have another beer!" ~ "Your inferiority complex is better than mine!"
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Chuck's a smart guy, eh, Jess?

You can learn all of these forms! The Nonet is probably the most challenging that I attempted when beginning new structures - the trick is to fit meaning within those nine lines and syllables. You know who taught me all of these? Magg, over at poets.com. Your mom and Cat probably remember or still talk to her. She's great - I miss her! We need her over here at Neo! Thanks for reading and commenting! ~ Ronda P.S. Nice new pic! :)
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Ronda...

I am glad too that you gave the explanation... I would have looked it up... some time or another.. well done.. enjoyed the read and the comments on your poem... Richard
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Richard

Yes, I think that when you introduce a new form of poetry (or one that will be new to some), offering the definition of the structure helps the reader work their way through the poem and its meaning. Your comments are always appreciated. Best, Ronda
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 11 months ago

Tonight Hronda, I’m going

Tonight Hronda, I'm going to roll up my sleeves and put my elbow to the metal er... start working on a Nonet. Check back with me in a few years. ;-) Hugs, Anna
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 11 months ago

What makes sense if you are

What makes sense if you are a dead man? Where do you go when breath is gone? Did you see the light pass on? Was terror the last sound? Memories die once. Troubled waters No bridges no one left. Phew. Anna
P

pinksheep

17 years 11 months ago

Spectacular

to put such powerful meaning in such a structured form ,GREAT MEANING ,GREAT POETRY.
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

My thanks

to both Leonard and Lesley. I appreciate and value your opinions. ~Ronda
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

Very well done

Quite a fine write and well thought out also. I seem to have found I enjoy reading these very much. Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a Liberal, you have no heart. At Thirty, if you are not a Conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill