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Table top entrophy



sit close by the table lamp
we drink and carelessly
gaze about the weekend
dancers

grab a waitress on the
way pastOrder another tray of
drinks

slip yet another twenty
away
fall further into mystic
deep transfixed by alcohol

your eyes aglow are
magnificently shattering
not a blue not a green
encompassed by the
path of rich dark orbits
and grand lashs

and the sadness
that holds my gravity
draws me down
like a tide

I sit wandering my heart
already wounded
round perceptions
there is no pinpoint
no place to call a pivot

so close we lean to talk
lean back to laugh

your souls anguish
written in pallid hues
is drowning all my
reasoning

I am falling
like a hundred
losses

just one look
tears apart
my barren
defences

I have
never
been
the
same

since


 
— orgami, Jun 21, 2008

Critiques

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LadyTheresa

56 years 7 months ago

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I just loved this! LadyTheresa
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 1 month ago

Orgami...

this is a tidal wave of images.. those eyes of your lady magnificent... I am falling like a hundred losses... wish I'd written that..! a wonderful read... thanks for posting.! Richard
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orgami

18 years ago

where this all falls from I know not God perhaps?

I only hope I am a good enough writer that I am not falsely using cheap words from my viewed thin vocabulary you dont know how I look up to some who speak everyday with such ease and chagrin words of wonder fall like adept hand tricks and Im mesmerized at their vocal treasures I only try to do what they surpass me at like sculpting im somewhat crude and a minimalist its only here that I try to be something of beauty and you polish with your urge and notations kind comments if it pleases you I am so grateful that I have achieved this at times
themoonman

themoonman

18 years ago

Orgami...

I would love to see your artwork.. even your crude sculpting.. you are truly an excellent artist at getting it down on paper. glad to be here and feel humbled by your words.. Richard
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bjp

17 years 2 months ago

Dear Orgami,

As is now normal, I find spicings in your flavoured words. I am falling like a hundred losses I like this phase very much. As I do your freehand notes. Regards, bjp

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