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SAKTHEEE2007
Jun 20, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

MY new gate

My new gate

Itis my new gate  to enter
May be it is a small and congestive
It is safe to enter and to travel
My old passage might be broad and huge
It was worst and cruel 
which swallowed my past and health
I t was a hell and devil's cave
He the Noble rescued me from that pit and
showed this heaven  to heal
My heart  prays Him to his mercy  and
it my shower it's tears with love
Thank my God ,My  Almighty
to my revival from that hell


Sakthi S.Ravichandran
— SAKTHEEE2007, Jun 20, 2008
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rahbar

18 years ago

my new gate.

Hello Sakkthee, very impressive....a prayer and praise of Almighty...very interesting indeed !! Rahbar.
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Arrow

18 years ago

I like it also. It’s like

I like it also. It's like a psalm and I think the images are perfect, the narrow gate, the pit, etc. It reads a little awkwardly, though. I assume English is not your native language so I don't know if you'd like any suggestions in that area. I look forward to reading some more of your writing.

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