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Betrayal (acrostic)

Blindly trusting

Exulted coward,

Trying to let it go

Ripping my heart out

A common occurrence,

You stabbed me in the back

An unapologetic glutinous liar

Languishing in your treachery

— Frost Smith, Jun 16, 2008

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 11 months ago

Oh yea...

now that is writing it down... excellent Frost ! Richard
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Frost

Excellent acrostic here, Frost. Have definitely been in those shoes before, and you did a good job expressing what it feels like. ~Jess K. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "You name me, entertain Thoughts of peace can overcome anything Mirror spins; wicked tales Here lies reflections of, deceptions of...." - Overjoyed (Jars of Clay)
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poewriter58

17 years 11 months ago

Frost

Excellent example of an acrostic Chrystalie
Mark

Mark

17 years 11 months ago

A beauty

It really is, Frost ! Mark
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 11 months ago

In a venomous way it is …

In a venomous way it is ... ;-) venomous vengeance forever engulfs a diabolical trinity newly established graciously salaciously gratuitously engraves itself upon it namesake and never understanding common bonds ends in two graves. Death marks its spot. Great poem Frost, thanks for the inspiration... Haven't done one of these in ages. Love ya, Anna
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

17 years 11 months ago

kailashana...

"eye for an eye leaves the whole world blind" Ghandi I myself am ok with that. Thanks Frost
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IKnowNoBox

17 years 11 months ago

A tough one to crack I am sure

I am a bit reserved about the ending line though.. left nothing to rebuild... "left lies in your wake" Left without honor... over all though a topic that really relates to my current study.. I have been thinking of challenging you with a multi word phrase acrostic.. I believe you could pull one off. In ink, Dabbler
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

17 years 11 months ago

IKnowNoBox...

Thanks for the help with the last line; wanted to leave the reader with a sense that is not over, one last thing with this one; which do you think sounds better: Ripping my heart out Or Ripping out my heart BTW...challenge accepted, my next acrostic will be multi word Thank you Frost
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

17 years 11 months ago

IKnowNoBox ...

I see what you mean about the last line; I'll give it some thought. Thank you Frost
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frangipangi

17 years 11 months ago

write to the point!

wonderful acrostic Frost. Stabs write (right) to the point and to the gut. Nowhere left to hide. Good work writer. Yours, Frangipangi "Good things happen when you meet strangers". Yo-Yo Ma
Rett

Rett

17 years 11 months ago

had to try it

Never tried one of these, looks like fun. Kindly intervention Increasing chances of survival Concerning vengeance Killing is never the Answer, though Stinging retorts are Some say I really liked it and if a reference to something that happed to you, my sympathies. I've been there. Rett ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Some call me lazy, I prefer Energy Conservationist~~~~~~~~~~~~~ That's P.C. speak by the way.
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

17 years 11 months ago

Rett...

Trying differnt styles broadens my horizons Thanks for commenting Frost
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rider68

17 years 11 months ago

Hi Frost

As I have begun to grow, and develop skills, which to now, has never been tapped or explored prior to joining this community, I can confidently say that something written so poignantly as this fine example of acrostics, is a great example, well understood, brilliantly delivered, and in times Past, I have painfully been at the receiving end, Great work…… Very Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

17 years 11 months ago

rider68...

you are correct; the entire point of this this site is to grow, your review is much apprciated. Thank you Frost
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 11 months ago

Who hasn’t been (or felt)

Who hasn't been (or felt) betrayed? It's an experience we all have in common as human beings. For some it's a killing field. ~A
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

17 years 11 months ago

nice one!

The second acrostic poem I read on the site. Great imagery and deep sensations, all these lead by "betrayal" Good job Frost! Sincerely, Marius
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

17 years 11 months ago

Marius-Surleac...

if you like the form I would suggest checking out Iknownobox; he is the one who introduced me to this style. Thanks for commenting Frost
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

17 years 11 months ago

Hi Frost!I know what implies

Hi Frost! I know what implies this kind of structured poetry (The Acrostic) and I like it, but for the moment I keep my concerning on other types of structured poetry. Thank you very much Marius
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MEL

17 years 11 months ago

Acroustic?

Mel Inwood Butterfly's in my stomach Lusting over him In his own world So fine... So devine! I have NO idea what acroustic is but how did I go?
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

17 years 11 months ago

Mel...

you seem to have it; first letter of each line spells a word Thanks Frost