Sonnet To The Birth Of Ideas

line 1 - 12 s line 2 - 12 s line 3 - 14 s line 4 - 12 s line 5 - 13 s line 6 - 11 s line 7 - 11 s line 8 - 12 s line 9 - 12 s line 10 - 13 s line 11 - 13 s line 12 - 9 s line 13 - 9 s line 14 - 10 s (s = syllables) You have problems with the prosody. This sonnet doesn't flow... In a sonnet you should create 14 lines following 10 syllables in each line, or in your case 12 syllables (if you want to give a nice flow to your writings). The sonnets of Shakespeare follow 10 syllables in each line. I advise you to read Shakespeare's work and learn how to put your own feelings in a sonnet, properly.

It takes a lot to write something out of your comfort zone. Just to touch lightly on the Shakesperean Sonnet: [English] The rhyme scheme is as follows; a b a b c d c d e f e f g g Two websites that explain the sonnet are: http://www.utm.ed/department/english/everett/sonnet.htm and: http://www.sonnets.org

Yes, the iambic pentameter defines Shakespeare's sonnets, but he wrote them using decasyllabic iamb (10 syllables). Of course you can use a pentameter with 11 or 12 syllables, but use 11 syllables for all your lines or 12 syllables for all of them. Not: line 1 - 12 syllables, line 2 - 13 syllables... line 14 - 10 syllables. You should be more careful at the rhythm too. Greetings!

cheers, Jess

do well in calling attention to the inconsistencies in meter. I'll have to add that I do think the rhyme is forced, as well. Making things "fit" just to achieve an objective is always a giveaway against sound creativity. Yours in peace, Synchro