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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Jun 12, 2008 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Memoirs

Memoirs

Life experiences
endeared moments
now forgotten

Cherished relations
a treasured heart
has been erased

Youthful beginnings
profound images
will one day be gone

Name carved in stone
in a fresh mowed garden
is where she will rest



— Barbara Writes, Jun 12, 2008

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Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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DarkinAZ

18 years 1 month ago

Peacfully...

This is very image provoking. The quiet resting place of one's mortal shell, respectfully tended and kept well. I would not wish this on anyone, though a reality we often forget and live as though there is no end. Great write, Mark
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Mark

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks mark for reading and the kind comment. Appreciate your interpretation. Alzheimer's is a tragedy. Finding out my twenty two year old made have this after countless surgery since birth has me down right now. Been hit by a few other trains lately.
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Jacob

18 years 1 month ago

Some profound imagery

I liked some of the phrases and images used to create the picture. I don't think th efirst stanza works with the repition of memoir and memories, it made it a bit disjointed when I read it. I like the shortness of the poem, almost like the sigh of loss. Jacob
Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Jacob

Smiles:) Barbara Thanks for reading and the fine suggestion. I agree that the first stanza don't work well. will look for a better workable word to replace memories. This is about the loss of precious memories Alzheimer's patient live through.
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

18 years 1 month ago

Barb

I agree with Jacob here. Another thought [just a thought] maybee switching the stanzas here I feel a different order here would greatly improve the reading~ thanks for posting~Nicely done Barb

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