Final Fire

Too hot to hold. That last line grabbed me and left it's mark. Been there many times. I like the stucture and flow. Excellent. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

in a tender, bleak kind of way. And totally relate. No crit on form. Title? Perhaps "Final Fire" or "Finished in Fire", finale tends to lead the reader to an expectation of climax. cheers, Jess

so good to have you back. And what an entrance I like Jess's suggestion of " Finished In Fire" Or ended In Fire see now let me confuse you some more finale is almost too whimsical for the nature of this poem. Something more tragic is needed Chrystalie

Always wonderful to see new work from you. I'm not sure about some of your enjambments, but I know how these words sometimes just present themselves in our minds in such a way that we write how they "sound" to us. Sometimes I go back and look at my own again and decide that they would work better with different line breaks (it also shortens the poem to the eye) - not suggesting that is necessary here, just an observation. Personally, I like the word "conflagration," but not sure if you could work it into a title here. Chrys and O both have great suggestions. One little thing, make your "to" a "too" in that last line. You always manage the greatest imagery. Good to see you back! Best, Ronda

What a great return.....This really stirs the imagination, I loved the theme and the way you portrayed the thought through the book, Hope you are now begining to feel better, Kindest Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

I loved the description of the curling, browning, and the black ash. The last line was awesome! You have a way with words~

never truly cools like the grey ash of a spent fire Cat. It stays burning for ever even when the flames lit by the words on its pages are gone. Always Keith

great write... is it a new one for you? I know it is new here but I imagine you are like most of us and have books and books of poetry ... regardless it is a wonderful write.. welcome back... Richard

As always, Cat, an excellent write. Did you mean 'tome' to be 'tomb'? Titles: Smouldering Embers? White-Hot Truth? Scaulding Remnents? Great to see you writing again! ~Jess K. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ~ "Those who dance are considered insane by those who can't hear the music. " - George Carlin ~ "If the opposite of 'pro' is 'con', then what is the opposite of progress?"

the title made the whole thing come together wonderfully...the imagery was extraordinary...I enjoyed this very much...even more so I know the feelings as well.

I like it. The poem is soft and calm, it creates a relaxing state to the reader (at least I felt when reading it). One small observation: in the last line you should use "too hot" instead of "to hot" Best wishes, Marius

long time no see. Glad to see you, feeling better? Great write, as always. Sincerely, Mark

I found the poem so bittersweet that it gave me flashbacks to long ago and far away and something that happened for the best, Lovely read. Rett PS. about Jess using tome in a poem, should you give a tome to a gnome errr I mean dwarf.