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life in america

american unguarded life's
a fragile frothy evanescence
flimsily afloat on seas of

constant corporate deception;
these terrorists rot from within,
these brawny horses trojan;

and, of course, our dead, our dying,
and our weakened honeybees
so thus befall from covert acts

of monopolizing, obscenely
profit-taking---and power-grabbing---
american agribusiness

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purplemoondoll

17 years 11 months ago

Ouch! This packs a mighty

Ouch! This packs a mighty punch. I really like the way you have made each stanza run into the next one. Your word choice and rhythm add real power to the content -brilliant job Chuck. I agree wholeheartedly with your point of view and the way you express it. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

Thanx

I must credit Claire Hope Cummings whose book Uncertain Peril, just out, inspires me to pen this (I think timely) piece. Yours as usual, Chuck
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 10 months ago

Chuck

Ahhh... I'll hold my tongue as to what I think about corporations. Must say that I love this write, though. Awww, are those l'il sheepies in your piccy there? ~Jess K. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "You name me, entertain Thoughts of peace can overcome anything Mirror spins; wicked tales Here lies reflections of,deceptions of...." - Overjoyed (Jars of Clay)
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barbsdad2003

17 years 10 months ago

Aw, shucks. Actually, ah, no, they ain't really sheepies ...

and I 'spect they might take offense at the label. After all, goats are lots smarter than "sheepies." This is my wife's candid shot at three old goats on a park bench. It's anybody's guess as to which of 'em's me. Thanx, as usual, for noticin'. I allus do 'preciate your comments. Chuck
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 10 months ago

Looks really, really, really closely....

My deepest apologies to the beautiful goats. I guess I don't do good with tiny pictures. I don't know, Chuck, they all look like whipper-snappers to me! *grins* Do they have names? Are they pets? what does Buster think of those monstrosities wandering about if they are! LOL ~Jess K. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "He wear no shoeshine, he got toe-jam football He got monkey finger, he shoot coca-cola He say "I know you, you know me" One thing I can tell you is you got to be free Come together right now over me." - The Beatles
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barbsdad2003

17 years 10 months ago

goats

Found the goats resting on a zoo park bench and decided to join them for relaxation and a picture. They were happy to oblige. No meeting between them and Buster, although I can imagine what opinion Buster might have! Chuckles
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rider68

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Chuck

Love the theme, and the thought behind it, quite into having a little rant a statement from the small guy,......Sorry..Can't help but think, Looking at the photo, there must be a funny caption there some-where, Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
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barbsdad2003

17 years 10 months ago

Thanx, Peter

It occurs to me (from reading your comment) that the big guys oughta take note of what they do to their own future health and long-term welfare. Doctors are so quick to blame genetics for the diabetes epidemic, for one example---diabetes, of course, being but one effect of a world gone amok---when it's the national environment (air, water, food supply, lack of sense of community) that ignores what makes us human that is most of all responsible for the harvest we reap. It's weird how we so willingly deny our evolutionary heritage and traipse off into far left field to experiment on people in our brave (cowardly?) new world. I've now informed myself enough on the subject to be really, really frightened by it all. A stress not altogether good for my health, frankly. Thanx for the look-see and comment, Chuck
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rider68

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Chuck

I remember there was a time, when I actually thought, how great life is/was, I mean, The quality of life, Maybe it could be just the phase of life, "The age" Not sure, but on reflection I think, the best years have been had, Values have so radically changed, Respect...Has become a somewhat alien word, family values have declined, Governments, don't serve, but dictate, The cold war still lingers in the minds of some, socialism, has been repacked, And reprinted, being feed back into the masses, and where we are so reconditioned Not to be allowed to voice/stand for self belief, principles have just waned, All in all, ……..Not to bad, our forefather that stood and died for their/our beliefs, Must be turning in their graves, wondering what was it all for, I’ll conclude and say, Stop worrying, we’re be a long time dead, what life we have left Just try and take what you can, Respectfully Best Regards Peter And by the way thanks for the pm……..peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

Courage.

Noam Chomsky would be proud of you. cheers, Jess
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IKnowNoBox

17 years 10 months ago

center stage Sir Bard

a middle finger raised.. on the sly.. or was he just "saluting". In ink, Dabbler ps Ahh I thinks A goat would indeed be insulted by such labeling as fleec-able flock-ers
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themoonman

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Chuck...

there you go again... I love this piece.. it says more and more every time I read it.. love the picture of the old goats too... and your sense of humour... Richard
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rider68

17 years 10 months ago

Hi Chuck

Yes It's me, Just to say, Congrats on spotlight, Hats off Sir.... Best Regards Peter ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~
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barbsdad2003

17 years 10 months ago

Thanx

To be frank, though, I suspect more than a little skulduggery's involved in getting some of the best pieces removed from the Spotlight prematurely. Something smells. Haven't got to the bottom of it yet, but maybe I'll start digging. Soon. Don't know whether it's jealousy that so motivates ... or perhaps pure and simple self-interest on the part of one or ones who throw a low vote at a piece that's thus prominented. (Or both.) By "self-interest," I mean it might be that some who are on the verge of getting in are raising their chances by downgrading another's work. Unfairly. It all doesn't smell right, and I think, really, the system needs changing so as to prevent such power to negate and manipulate falling into the hands of but one or two voters who go against the more prevailing grain that supports a particular piece gaining the Spotlight designation. Thanx again, Chuck PS: An unfortunate side effect of such behavior is to make the Spotlight designation something less than credible. In so many words, it can become rather meaningless: An unfortunate happenstance, in my view, and not conducive to encouraging better writing. Cheating has a way of accomplishing that sort of thing. I've learned to disregard the Spotlight. I may like the piece that's so marked, but the mere fact that it's spotlighted holds little to no value for me.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 10 months ago

There are dickheads everywhere

even here. A vote of 1 can remove a poem from the Spotlight. That's why I suggest instead of voting by number we only suggest to Spotlight. To be be fair, your fine verse has had spotlight status often. And well deserved. One member was booted for voting 1 on other poems to get his poem in Spotlight. You know who I mean, you spotted it. He claimed to do good. cheers, Jess
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barbsdad2003

17 years 10 months ago

Thanx, Jess

Appreciate your support. I know I've had a number of pieces spotlighted---and that, of course, I also appreciate, thanx to more than a few readers at this site who've liked my work (and commented) from time to time. My two-cent suggestion? Allowing only five-star votes, none others. (And if the system remains pretty much as is, I'd suggest at least a requirement that voters identify themselves---and post a (usually) logic-driven reason for a vote whenever it's under the maximal five stars (assuming the situation now present stands).) Whenever a piece deserves something less than a five (a less-than-five vote being unavailable under my optimal suggestion), then a comment to encourage particular improvement can suffice. And when/if changes are then made by the author that succeed in bringing the work up to a five (or world class) rating, then cast the vote at the moment (or soon after) of its warranting the five. Thanx again, Chuck