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Absolute Nothings

The absolute nothings have returned
to claim the remains of this howling day
wresting huge chunks of something,
like dancing lemmings on the proverbial brink,
biting thoughts
scamper incognito and depressed
chewing
salient mind bones
somewhere
across the infiltrated back of my residual
brain droppings,

I wish I could say I had been beyond that
in fact, I wish I could say I was
an official at my own royal presiding
even if
I am awkward in this inclement state--
still inspired of a distinct and noble truth
not yet
the almighty fractured and dislocating lie,
Yeah, hark!
the herald angels sing,
and wisdom's tooth and hound are barking
at my door, quiet riots abound all around me
alas
and cheerio,
I am the breakfast of champions
(Have they been waiting patiently in the banquet hall?)
the object of a frenzied feasting
by half-starved glass-eyed
sleek sharks
of a stark and contagous yesterday,
so what do I do with what is left of this bleak winter's iced morning?
I suppose
I shall have to gather up my leftover star-studded persona
from the harvest moon's floor,

I have barely begun to mop up after
all the muss and the fuss
and I shall have to dig a bit deeper still
into the fecund earth
just to make a little room for myself.
— Kailashana, Jun 10, 2008

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Rolwright

17 years 12 months ago

Well Just Release Yourself

I felt like you were just letting go of alot of stress like there is something or someone just getting you to a point that you are just trying to release all that you feel I'm staring from a stand point like you know I know I'm not what you thought I was so let me just be what I am Someone who dosen't deserve to be on your buddylist and someone who didn't even deserve to get to know a person like you cause I know everything happens for a reason but I also know that the people you believe in don't always turn out to be who you thought they were I'm nothing more then a man clinging on to anything I think cares about me so if I came off to you as trying to get to know you better I'm sorry but you know if I seriously thought I could even step foot in your presence I would but I know that I couldn't so I wouldn't even try Goodbye
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 12 months ago

Goodness R… we’re all in

Goodness R... we're all in the same boat on the net, aren't we? We can and do create all types of personas and we are never quite sure of whom we are conversing (with).... However, clinging isn't necessary when one KNOWS who one is... ...it's being at ease with oneself. Light, Anna
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purplemoondoll

17 years 12 months ago

THe opening verse for me is

The opening verse for me is the best. You have created some great imagery and the structure really works to give that imagery impact. You 'took me there' in the first verse. After that I felt the structure let you down a little. There are some great phrases and expressions but for me they seem to be a little lost. See what you think. A little reworking and restucturing could really bring the rest of this poem to life. If you like it the way it is then please feel free to ignore my comments - welcome to the site! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 12 months ago

lol Kaz, I’m been here for

lol Kaz, I'm been here for a couple months, under Anna Ruiz, anabebe, and now kailashana... most remember me, apparently you don't...that's ok.. and as far as the reworkings... thanks but no thanks... it's meant to meander through all kinds of dark alleys of my feelings, mindful of nothing at all ;-) as I mentioned, it was an exercise into my boredom. Peace, Anna