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Last Weekend in Bohemian Wisconsin

Dance with me temptation -
Van Gogh nights with Ra Fury jazz
filling the air like fireworks

We will flirt and sip drinks
pretending to be noir
as you grope and we laugh

Tornado beach parties
breathing Wisconsin
at above legal limit

Walk of shame for the guiltless
who carry no burdens
heels like tap shoes

We get lost with a purpose
Palatine and midway
with White Castle breaks

Blunts and echoes of stories
decorated with stolen street signs
occupied by the scientist whose skin cries

— Lynn Jasmin, Jun 10, 2008

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purplemoondoll

18 years 1 month ago

Blunts and echoes of

Blunts and echoes of stories decorated with stolen street signs These lines really stood out for me. I enjoyed reading this and look forward to seeing more. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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LadyTheresa

56 years 7 months ago

I like your piece Lynn

It's raw and I especially like the line "blunts and echoes" too-this is very colorful and descriptive. Kudos! LadyTheresa

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