A Man Grows Hard With Time

Only one section could use a restructure here: "and little to do than break the backs of being" It doesn't flow well with the rest. Mostly the "and little to do than" now that I think about it again. The rest looks great! ~ Ronda

sleeping with rainbows Anna, you never know what lies at the end of them. Something of a wistful cameo of a poem that feels as if it was going to be more but decided to leave the other questions up there in the stars. Perhaps the last verse should be structured as: But in the arms of a woman he’ll soften inside her, spent like a swollen night, a sky full of stars. Perhaps you should listen to Amos Lee's "In the arms of a woman" if you have not heard it. lol www.youtube.com/watch?v=w5hPVqPMywc

I love this one Anna B