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Sonnet 3

The rain of summer fills the empty shores
Before a gleam shall hide from sun to earth
In holes of sand that open thirteen doors
A dusty world - the shining of one firth.
I cannot bear to see those bloody eyes
How grovel to the gates of storm. As lord,
My quiver calls for death and weather cries
Like no one cried below the moaning chord...
Perverted are the claws of faith, but still
The water cleans our hands in wisdom. I
Am now against the Eden to fulfill
My destiny that put me here to lie.
Over and over, waves are turning wise
As if the time were glowing through the skies.


 
— Unlight, Jun 09, 2008

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years ago

Unlight

Once again you find the deepest recesses of the mind and pull them to the surface. "As if the time were glowing through the skies" - a lasting image of beauty. Was the formatting here intentional or did the poem change upon copying and pasting into the submission? Just curious as to whether or not you had a reason for it. Best, Ronda
Unlight

Unlight

17 years 12 months ago

Well… I copied the poem

Well... I copied the poem from a .txt document to the submission box. I think the poem changed upon copying and pasting into the submission. Greetings!
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Sonnet 3

I am not a great lover of the sonnet, probably because I tried so hard to write one, and never finished it they are very hard to do. {for me anyway] I loved what you did here and I absolutely love it, great write poet!
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Jacob

17 years 11 months ago

I agree I love sonnets and

I agree I love sonnets and wish I could write them well, they are just so hard! I am slightly envious of your poetic sonnet skill. Jacob
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MeanderS

17 years 11 months ago

MAY THE LORD BLES U!!!! the

MAY THE LORD BLES U!!!! the silence of the sonnet seeps into the heart...an' stays there...an everlastin touch of truth, perceptions...an'the line'the water cleans our hand in wisdom'...is one of the best lines ..i think i hav ever come across...truly this is wonderful a piece...alive an' singing like the waves upon the shores...thankyou friend!!! wishes al the v. best!
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poewriter58

17 years 11 months ago

How grovel to the gates this

How grovel to the gates this line confused me , perhaps it is just I, in it's wording I've not written many structured poems but seeing your talent for the Sonnet is sparking my curiosity to see if I indeed could write one Chrystalie
Unlight

Unlight

17 years 11 months ago

Jess,

It's wrong to judge a sonnet or a poem just for the title. You don't have to read the title; read the text. The titles of my sonnets are perfect as they are. Titles as "Sonnet 2" or "Sonet 50" (for example) give more mystery to the writing. Greetings!
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

17 years 11 months ago

Unlight

Did Shakespeare not use titles for his in the same manner you have? In my experience, many sonnets are not named, but numbered as you have done here. ~ Ronda
Unlight

Unlight

17 years 11 months ago

Ronda,

Yes, Shakespeare used to write his sonnets under titles like "Sonnet XV" or "Sonnet XX".
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

Ok, I read and glad I did.

Powerful beautiful work. Just one tiny, niggling suggestion. I like to see a stanza break between the 8th and 9th line, purity of form and helps emphasise the concluding theme. I will read more. Still would like to see titles, which could become almost a necessity as there has been a suggestion to put only the titles in the stream, without the teaser. You might want to think about that. cheers, Jess
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Synchro

17 years 10 months ago

Excellent work as always

Please indulge this savage ignorance of mine, and explain the "thirteen doors?" I'm sure it has a literary reference but it hasn't dawned on me. Thanks. Yours in peace, (Cynthia McKinney for president) Synchro