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Sonnet 2

Let's fight the air and spread a fire ball
That shall not pass with arms or legs in heat,
But we'll be there and see the meaning, small,
Embracing souls, tonight, beneath our feet.
The mighty fog, the castle and the light
We're forced to hunt inside a starving heart,
Are just in vain or lesser than the fight
For love to be a place occult and smart?
Where are we now, in heaven or in hell?
The demons brought the silence with their mean
Emotions carved in deepness as a spell
For those the Earth will be the last they've seen.
My life is victim to your arms, along
With trees and rocks that are already strong.
— Unlight, Jun 08, 2008

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RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years ago

Unlight

Your style is unique and I think that some would have trouble following the steady train of thought. I hope that they try, though. The read is worth it - more than once. It's a matter of personal preference, and I happen to enjoy it. Others may come along and not be as agreeable, but this piece speaks to me as it is. Best, Ronda
Unlight

Unlight

18 years ago

Ronda, i’m glad that you

Ronda, i'm glad that you can find the essence of my lyrics, because they come from an hidden place called soul... Greetings!
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barbsdad2003

17 years 11 months ago

Rich with ...

suggested meaning. Natural---thankfully unprocessed/unfiltered---food for thought/reflection/meditation here. I detect a sort of communing/communion/community of feelings, interests, senses that hobnob (at times delightfully, other times somberly) within one person. A nice piece of work. Thanx, Chuck PS: As to mechanics and splitting hairs, American English spells fire ball as one word, fireball. Don't have a Brit dictionary in front (or at the side) of me at the moment, so I can't vouch for the way they spell it.
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poewriter58

17 years 11 months ago

Line six we forced may I

Line six we forced may I suggest we are forced As Ronda suggested this is worth reading I see the beauty in it's meaning very well done Chrystalie
Unlight

Unlight

17 years 11 months ago

Chrystalie,

I put in the line six "we're" instead of "we are" for the rhythm. Thanks for your suggestion! Greetings!
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 11 months ago

Daniel

Every sonnet I read of your's is filled with depth love them!
Unlight

Unlight

17 years 11 months ago

Janine,

There's no problem. It happens sometimes.
Unlight

Unlight

17 years 11 months ago

Janice

My mistake now... Janice instead of Janine at the subject of the anterior message!
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Synchro

17 years 10 months ago

Beautiful sonnet, and very powerful

Few contemporary sonnets contain the depth of feeling this one does...and that feeling is made worthy by its language and music. The final couplet is a killer. Yours in peace, (Cynthia McKinney for president) Synchro
yenti

yenti

17 years 7 months ago

Unlight

A lovely piece of writing, Now as to the bits Fireball is one word but not to worry it has two sylables, its not even in the American slang book so had to go to the Oxford for both Sonnet and Fireball, from now on I am just going to read the poetry and not notice anything except the meaning portrayed by the words. LOL Yours, Ian.T