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My Love In A Poem

Just in case
we don't make it
in this life
and can't find each other
in the next
take this
these my words
carefully selected
and sorted to specification
living forever in literature
the literal demonstration
of all I felt inside
living in the moment
letting myself
let go
into the pleasure
that was you
at that time
and perhaps
days, months, maybe even
minutes later
that all
may change
but then
you got this
when you miss me
each of these words
a kiss I once
gave to you
every syllable a secret
I told you
laying in your arms
looking up into your eyes
from beginning to end
enveloped in these lines
lay the best part
of me there is to hold on to
my love in a poem 

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weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 11 months ago

The first really original,

intelligent and yet still passionate and true love poem I have read in a very long time. Congratulations, this is truly an achievement. It seems like you accidentally double pasted it from my love in a poemJust in case so i read it as just one part. Did you mean the repetition? (vote will change to 5 when this is clarified) cheers, Jess
Marius Surleac

Marius Surleac

17 years 11 months ago

there is something twice posted

Instead of "take this / these my words" I found to be more suitable "take these, / my words,"; also "my love in a poem just in case" instead of "poemjust" (typing mistake). Ok, now I understand - see that your poem is repeated, you pasted twice when you posted! Leaving all these behind, I sense a soft love poem, ruled by words - whispered syllables and dreaming with eyes wide open. Cheers, Marius
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Catalina

17 years 11 months ago

it is a bad habit of mine, I

it is a bad habit of mine, I just write when I feel the feeling and I never proof - so typos are like almost always able to be found...I know that I should and yet I still don't - very glad that liked despite all that though, lol:)
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purplemoondoll

17 years 11 months ago

I am not the biggest fan of

I am not the biggest fan of love poetry but this is exceptional and made me want to read through several times. Brilliant poetry. :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 11 months ago

Catalina

"every syllable a secret I told you laying in your arms looking up into your eyes from beginning to end enveloped in these lines lay the best part of me there is to hold on to" - Don't know what it is about these lines that put a smile on my face, but know that they did. Very nice write. ~Jess K. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ~ "Those who dance are considered insane by those who can't hear the music. " - George Carlin ~ "If the opposite of 'pro' is 'con', then what is the opposite of progress?"